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Verbal and Nonverbal CommunicationWhen we speak with other people face-to-face the nonverbal signals we give—our facial expressions, hand gestures, body movements, and tone of voice—often communicate as much as, or more than, the words we utter. When v.1

Verbal and Nonverbal CommunicationWhen we speak with other people face-to-face the nonverbal signals we give—our facial expressions, hand gestures, body movements, and tone of voice—often communicate as much as, or more than, the words we utter. When v. 1
In this expeditiously transforming world, the role of a woman in the various sectors is a highly debated topic, and attracts a lot of opinions. Some people believe that they should have equal contribution as men in the armed forces, but others tend to differ. In a progressing country like India, I believe that equal opportunity should be given to both men and women. To embark on the side which supports women to join military force, some reckon that women stand with men in all the parameters like physical strength, decision making and tactical planning, which are indispensable in the armed forces. Next, women have an enhanced pain bearing capacity. As a result, they will not only outweigh their male partners, but also motivate them. To illustrate, labour pain during pregnancy is known to be one of most painful sufferings and we all know how women bear that without complaining. Accentuating the compelling outlook, which restricts a woman to join the army or other forces, contemplates that they are not physically strong enough. Due to which, they might not be able to survive in harsh climatic conditions. For example, in Siachen, where the temperature drops to -50 degrees Celsius, staying alive is a challenge. Moreover, their biological differences might create hindrances in training and other field activities as a result, the efficiency will get dwindled. Apart from the physical aspect, some savants propound that most women are timid at heart and emotionally weaker than men, thus putting them last in the line. To summarize, I contemplate that women should be given equal chances as men, and should be encouraged to join the armed forces. If they are successful in fields like business, science, technology and others, they will put maximum effort for this as well. Sidelining them for some prejudice is not as appreciated way, as they have the capability to handle it proficiently.
In this
expeditiously
transforming world, the role of a woman in the various sectors is a
highly
debated topic, and attracts
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a lot of
opinions.
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Some
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people
believe that they should have equal contribution as
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men
in the armed
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forces
,
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but
others tend to differ. In a progressing country like India, I believe that equal opportunity should be
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given
to both
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men
and women.

To embark on the side which supports
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women
to
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join
military
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force
,
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some
reckon that
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women
stand with
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men
in all the parameters like physical strength,
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decision making
and tactical planning, which are indispensable in the armed
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forces
.
Next
,
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women
have an enhanced pain bearing capacity.
As a result
, they will not
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only
outweigh their male partners,
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but
also
motivate them. To illustrate,
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labour
pain during pregnancy
is known
to be one of most painful
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sufferings and
we all know how
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women
bear that without complaining.

Accentuating the compelling outlook, which restricts a woman to
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join
the army or
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other
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forces
, contemplates that they are not
physically
strong
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enough
. Due to which, they might not be able to survive in harsh climatic conditions.
For example
, in
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Siachen
, where the temperature drops to -50 degrees Celsius, staying alive is a challenge.
Moreover
, their biological differences might create hindrances in training and
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other
field activities
as a result
, the efficiency will
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get
dwindled. Apart from the physical aspect,
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some
savants propound that most
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women
are timid at heart and
emotionally
weaker than
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men
,
thus
putting them last in the line.

To summarize
, I contemplate that
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women
should be
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given
equal chances as
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men
, and should
be encouraged
to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
join
the armed
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
forces
. If they are successful in fields like business, science, technology
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and others
, they will put maximum effort for this
as well
. Sidelining them for
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
prejudice is not as appreciated way, as they have the capability to handle it
proficiently
.
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes

IELTS essay Verbal and Nonverbal CommunicationWhen we speak with other people face-to-face the nonverbal signals we give—our facial expressions, hand gestures, body movements, and tone of voice—often communicate as much as, or more than, the words we utter. When v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
314 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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