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tpo4. task Verbal and Nonverbal CommunicationWhen we speak with other people face-to-face the nonverbal signals we give—our facial expressions, hand gestures, body movements, and tone of voice—often communicate as much as, or more than, v.1

tpo4. task Verbal and Nonverbal CommunicationWhen we speak with other people face-to-face the nonverbal signals we give—our facial expressions, hand gestures, body movements, and tone of voice—often communicate as much as, or more than, v. 1
Nowadays, the pressure in our life regarding work and family was increased in contrast with the past. People tried to find ways to escape from these situations and in my opinion, they have found a high-risk way. A lot of people prefer to do an extreme sport like climbing or parasailing, to release the stress and pressure that may have, and not some simpler sports like running. In the society that we live today, it is more common to work for a living. To have the necessity to get the experience from some unusual sports it means that makes you feel alive and this is what our civilization need. For example, people, which have authority in their position, sometimes needs to come face to face with the fear of their lives to adapt in ordinary life. Moreover, some people want to gain the adrenaline that these sports offer and this can only accomplish by living on the edge. I believe that is a good trend for several reasons. Initially, these sports have a crucial benefit in the economies of tourist destinations because they are expensive. For example, if someone like me which I am from Cyprus, wants to do a volcano boarding needs to travel in countries that offer the specific sport which means that I have to pay for my tickets and for the fees of this sport. However, to come across with death, it's not the only way to feel alive. There are other options to relax yourself and escape from problems that may have. A paradigm is to do sports that are not so risky like running or going to a gym, or the acquisition of hobbies could be even better for climbing a mountain. To conclude, it is a good trend and if I have the opportunity to do extreme sports in the future, I will do it without doubt.
Nowadays, the pressure in our life regarding work and family
was increased
in contrast
with the past.
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People
tried to find ways to escape from these situations and in my opinion, they have found a high-
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risk
way.
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A lot of
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people
prefer to do an extreme
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sport
like climbing or parasailing, to release the
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stress
and pressure that may have, and not
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
simpler
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sports
like running.

In the society that we
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live
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today
, it is more common to work for a living. To have the necessity to
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get
the experience from
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some
unusual
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sports
it means that
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makes
you feel alive and this is what our civilization need.
For example
,
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people
, which have authority in their position,
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sometimes
needs to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
come
face to face with the fear of their
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lives
to adapt in ordinary life.
Moreover
,
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some
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people
want to gain the adrenaline that these
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
sports
offer and this can
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
only
accomplish by living on the edge.

I believe
that is
a
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good
trend for several reasons.
Initially
, these
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sports
have a crucial benefit in the economies of tourist destinations
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because
they are expensive.
For example
, if someone like me which I am from Cyprus, wants to do a volcano boarding needs to travel in countries that offer the specific
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
sport
which means that I
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
have to
pay for my tickets and for the fees of this
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
sport
.
However
, to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
come
across with death, it's not the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
only
way to feel alive. There are other options to relax yourself and escape from problems that may have. A paradigm is to do
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
sports
that are not
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
so
risky like running or going to a gym, or the acquisition of hobbies could be even better for climbing a mountain.

To conclude
, it is a
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
good
trend and if I have the opportunity to do extreme
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
sports
in the future, I will do it without doubt.
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes

IELTS essay tpo4. task Verbal and Nonverbal CommunicationWhen we speak with other people face-to-face the nonverbal signals we give—our facial expressions, hand gestures, body movements, and tone of voice—often communicate as much as, or more than, v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
314 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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