Some people insists that students in universities are not spending enough time on their studies and having too much leisure time. It seems that they are wasting their time, but they are truly struggling to get a job or to success in the cut-throat world. This essay totally disagree with the opinion that university students are not studying and will discuss why this situation is happening.
It is undeniable that people in universities are putting much time to do something else, such as part-time jobs, unpaid internships and club activities, instead of putting their all energy on the studies. One of the major reasons is because companies require lots of experience as well as GPA. In the past the only thing that requirements to get a job was good marks in classes. However, since society have been competitive, applicants are required to do extra activities to fill their resumes to get a decent job.
Furthermore, universities also encourage students to do non-academic activities and recreational activities to make them mentally and physically healthy, which end up leading them to get a satisfying job, and they do not allow students to graduate if they do not have any extra experiences. Nowadays, more companies want to employ the one who is mentally stable and can successfully communicate with colleagues, which means they no longer only require high scores(A and A+). Hence, students have had to do volunteering and work out to make their portfolio. For instance, Seoul National University have let students submit their portfolio to graduate.
To sum up, even if it seems that they are not studying enough compared to past students, it is because current students are required to do extra activities by companies and schools. They are actually doing both studying and non-academic things.
Some
people
insists
that
students
in
universities
are not spending
enough
time
on their studies and having too much leisure
time
. It seems that they are wasting their
time
,
but
they are
truly
struggling to
get
a
job
or to success in the
cut
-throat world. This essay
totally
disagree with the opinion that
university
students
are not studying and will discuss why this situation is happening.
It is undeniable that
people
in
universities
are putting much
time
to do something else, such as part-time
jobs
, unpaid internships and club
activities
,
instead
of putting their all energy on the studies. One of the major reasons is
because
companies
require lots of experience
as well
as GPA. In the past the
only
thing that requirements to
get
a
job
was
good
marks in classes.
However
, since society have been competitive, applicants
are required
to do extra
activities
to fill their resumes to
get
a decent job.
Furthermore
,
universities
also
encourage
students
to do non-academic
activities
and recreational
activities
to
make
them mentally and
physically
healthy, which
end
up leading them to
get
a satisfying
job
, and they do not
allow
students
to graduate if they do not have any extra experiences. Nowadays, more
companies
want to employ the one who is mentally stable and can
successfully
communicate with colleagues, which means they no longer
only
require high scores(A and A+).
Hence
,
students
have had to
do volunteering
and work out to
make
their portfolio.
For instance
, Seoul National
University
have
let
students
submit their portfolio to graduate.
To sum up, even if it seems that they are not studying
enough
compared to past
students
, it is
because
current
students
are required
to do extra
activities
by
companies
and schools. They are actually doing both studying and non-academic things.
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