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University experience is more important than a university’s degree. Some people argue that university life is much more important than an educational degree in job market. Do you agree or not agree? v.1

University experience is more important than a university’s degree. Some people argue that university life is much more important than an educational degree in job market. Do you agree or not agree? v. 1
There is a significant change in buying trends of people in some developing countries over the last few years. People tend to invest more on modern and new products to avail maximum benefits associated with them. I agree to some extent that economic prosperity, high wages, attractive advertisements and improved quality of products ignite people to buy the latest products. However, it has many detrimental effects on the environment that leads to pollution, deforestation and massive quality of rubbish in societies. There is no denying that people’s living standards have been improved with economic success. Increased in pay and reduced prices of commodities have dramatically risen the buying capacity of the people. Additionally, advertisement plays a pivotal role in attracting people’s attention to new and modern products. For example, commercial consistently ignite people desires to buy products that are trendy, modern and advanced. Furthermore, people have become workaholics and hardly get enough time for repairing products. It is also seen that some time repairing cost is much higher of the actual values of the product that also discourage people to repair old things. Despite the benefits, it also has dire consequences on the environment, in order to fulfil the demands of contemporary people, companies are exploiting natural resources. Deforestation, de-vegetation and lagging are prevalent in many societies. Moreover, people are producing more rubbish by discarding traditional items and adopting products of presents-days. To sum up, I would like to say that products of today’s age are more advanced and efficient than conventional, thus these attract large numbers of people because of their undeniable benefits. Governments and individuals should make attempts to create awareness about reusing and recycling of items. Consequently, it will help in cleaning parks and streets from massive litters of wasted disposable cups, plates and bags.
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people
in
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some
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developing countries
over the last few years.
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People
tend to invest more on modern and new
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products
to avail maximum benefits associated with them. I
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agree
to
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some
extent that economic prosperity, high wages, attractive advertisements and
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improved
quality of
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products
ignite
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people
to
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buy
the latest
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products
.
However
, it has
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many
detrimental effects on the environment that leads to pollution, deforestation and massive quality of rubbish in societies.

There is no denying that
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people’s
living standards have been
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improved
with economic success. Increased in pay and
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reduced
prices of commodities have
dramatically
risen the buying capacity of the
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people
.
Additionally
, advertisement plays a pivotal role in attracting
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people’s
attention to new and modern
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products
.
For example
, commercial
consistently
ignite
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people
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desires
to
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buy
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products
that are trendy, modern and advanced.
Furthermore
,
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people
have become workaholics and hardly
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get
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enough
time for repairing
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products
. It is
also
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seen
that
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some
time repairing cost is much higher of the actual values of the
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product
that
also
discourage
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people
to repair
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old
things.

Despite the benefits, it
also
has dire consequences on the environment, in order to fulfil the demands of contemporary
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people
,
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companies
are exploiting natural resources. Deforestation,
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de-vegetation
and lagging are prevalent in
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many
societies.
Moreover
,
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people
are producing more rubbish by discarding traditional items and adopting
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products
of presents-days.

To sum up, I would like to say that
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products
of
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today
’s age are more advanced and efficient than conventional,
thus
these attract large numbers of
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people
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because
of their undeniable benefits.
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Governments
and individuals should
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make
attempts to create awareness about reusing and recycling of items.
Consequently
, it will
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help
in cleaning parks and streets from massive litters of wasted disposable cups, plates and bags.
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IELTS essay University experience is more important than a university’s degree. Some people argue that university life is much more important than an educational degree in job market. Do you agree or not agree? v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
298 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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