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Traffic congestion is becoming a huge problem for many major cities Suggest some measures that could be taken to reduce traffic in big cities v.1

Traffic congestion is becoming a huge problem for many major cities Suggest some measures that could be taken to reduce traffic in big cities v. 1
Ever since the advance of the Internet, public libraries have lost their importance. Some people opine that libraries are unnecessary, while others think that they are still significant in the modern world. In my opinion, libraries have lost its value in recent days. This essay will discuss why it has lost its importance. First of all what is the primary function of public libraries? It has a huge collection of books and magazines where people can find information related to various topics and grow their knowledge. Individuals won't be able to purchase all the books that they need to understand a certain topic, that will fill the entire house. Instead by visiting public libraries, people can just get the knowledge that they need without owning the books forever. Once the knowledge is obtained, books are just things that occupy additional space. By borrowing it from the library, one single book benefits multiple members. In addition, it provides a quiet environment where the readers can immerse themselves in books. On top of that, seeing a group of people reading actively, motivates you to read as well. However, with the recent advancement in the Internet and online applications, all the information needed are readily available on the Internet through various applications like google, e libraries, forums, etc. It saves plenty of time taken to travel to a public library and are just a few clicks away. Furthermore, one doesn't have to search through several books to get the specific information required, online applications like google does it for us. It provides precise results by searching all the forums available on the Internet in the entire world. This saves a plenty of time. To conclude, though the public libraries provide multiple reasons for avid readers to visit and read in a calm environment, material available on the Internet provide all the benefits provided by a public library and saves precious time as well. So public libraries are losing their significance over the Internet.
Ever since the advance of the Internet,
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public
libraries have lost their importance.
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Some
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people
opine that libraries are unnecessary, while others
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think
that they are
still
significant in the modern world. In my opinion, libraries have lost its value in recent days. This essay will discuss why it has lost its importance.

First
of all what is the primary function of
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public
libraries? It has a huge collection of
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books
and magazines where
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people
can find information related to various topics and grow their knowledge. Individuals won't be able to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
purchase
all the
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books
that they need to understand a certain topic, that will fill the entire
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house
.
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Instead
by visiting
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public
libraries,
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people
can
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just
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get
the knowledge that they need without owning the
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books
forever. Once the knowledge
is obtained
,
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books
are
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just
things that occupy additional space. By borrowing it from the library, one single
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book
benefits multiple members.
In addition
, it
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provides
a quiet environment where the readers can immerse themselves in
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books
.
On top of that
, seeing a group of
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people
reading
actively
, motivates you to read
as well
.

However
, with the recent advancement in the Internet and online applications, all the information needed are
readily
available on the Internet through various applications like google, e libraries, forums, etc. It saves
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plenty
of time taken to travel to a
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public
library and are
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just
a few clicks away.
Furthermore
, one doesn't
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have to
search through several
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books
to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
get
the specific information required, online applications like google does it for us. It
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
provides
precise results by searching all the forums available on the Internet in the entire world. This saves a
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
plenty
of time.

To conclude
, though the
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public
libraries
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provide
multiple reasons for avid readers to visit and read in a calm environment, material available on the Internet
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provide
all the benefits provided by a
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public
library and saves precious time
as well
.
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So
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public
libraries are losing their significance over the Internet.
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes

IELTS essay Traffic congestion is becoming a huge problem for many major cities Suggest some measures that could be taken to reduce traffic in big cities v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
330 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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