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Traffic congestion is becoming a huge problem for many major cities. Suggest some measures that could be taken to reduce traffic in big cities. v.1

Traffic congestion is becoming a huge problem for many major cities. Suggest some measures that could be taken to reduce traffic in big cities. v. 1
Nowadays, it is obvious that the congestion in most countries is on the increase and cities are becoming busier. In my opinion, this problem must be tackled because it is a global issue and most people, especially those who live in big cities, are affected by it. One of the main reason for traffic jams is that the majority of people prefer using their own cars instead of public transportation. However, it is not impossible to find good and effective ways to control the congestion. Public transportation is the easiest way to solve this problem. If there is comfortable and cheap public transportation such as trains and buses, people will choose to use it rather than drive. For instance, in Manchester, Stagecoach buses are the most convenient buses that help to reduce traffic on roads and streets during rush hours. In fact, government should provide much better public transportation and charge prices that are affordable for everyone. Another solution to solve traffic problem is to charge a congestion free for every car that will go into a city centre district. This will either discourage people from driving into that area, or raise more income for public transportation. A good example of this situation is London, which now has a congestion charge. Entering to traffic zone in the city centre in London costs about 8 pounds per day. In conclusion, the problem of traffic congestion can be tackled by improving public transportation and by charging drivers who enter into city centre traffic zone.
Nowadays, it is obvious that the
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congestion
in most countries is on the increase and
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cities
are becoming busier. In my opinion, this
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problem
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must
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because
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people
,
especially
those who
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live
in
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big
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cities
, are
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affected
by it.

One of the main reason for
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traffic
jams is that the majority of
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people
prefer using their
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own
cars
instead
of
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public
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transportation
.
However
, it is not impossible to find
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good
and effective ways to control the
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congestion
.
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Public
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transportation
is the easiest way to solve this
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problem
. If there is comfortable and
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cheap
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public
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transportation
such as trains and buses,
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people
will choose to
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use
it
rather
than drive.
For instance
, in Manchester, Stagecoach buses are the most convenient buses that
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help
to
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reduce
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traffic
on roads and streets during rush hours. In fact,
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government
should provide much better
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public
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transportation
and charge prices that are affordable for everyone.

Another solution to solve
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traffic
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problem
is to charge a
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congestion
free for every car that will go into a city
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centre
district. This will either discourage
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people
from driving into that area, or raise more income for
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public
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transportation
. A
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good
example of this situation is London, which
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now
has a
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congestion
charge. Entering to
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traffic
zone in the city
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centre
in London costs about
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8 pounds
per day.

In conclusion
, the
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problem
of
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traffic
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congestion
can
be tackled
by improving
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public
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transportation
and by charging drivers who enter into city
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centre
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traffic
zone.
6Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
33Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
4Mistakes
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IELTS essay Traffic congestion is becoming a huge problem for many major cities. Suggest some measures that could be taken to reduce traffic in big cities. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
252 words
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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Lexical Resource: 5.0
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  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
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  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
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