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Nowadays people buy a lot of things even though they don’t really need them. Why is it happening, in your opinion? Is it a positive or negative trend for the individual and the society? v.1

Nowadays people buy a lot of things even though they don’t really need them. Why is it happening, in your opinion? Is it a positive or negative trend for the individual and the society? v. 1
The staff members are the image of the company that they should be well dressed. However, some people say that the working quality is more essential. There is a debate between these views, which one is more important? There are numerous benefits to require employees to wear uniform. They believe that the appearance has a vital effect on the first strong impression. Moreover, staffs wearing uniform also advertise for the company that when people look at the face they will know the workplace name. Furthermore, when workers dress as same as their colleagues, there will be less compare between people and people. In addition, there are some people that should wear elegant clothes such as doctor and businessperson. This might show off the professional and respect to their customers. On the other hand, some workplaces allow their employees to wear casual clothes and I can understand your point of views. According to freelancers, the activities usually no need to meet face to face, especially the clients. This type a workers prefer focusing on their productivity than the looking. There are a large number of companies might say that different and colourful outfits could boost more creativity and development. Also, workers will pay less time for choosing and changing clothes. One example is Facebook, which is a big company in the world, let their staff members wear whatever they want. Overall, in my opinion, I believe that both these views depend on the nature of the work. If employees who have to work directly with clients, they will need a good looking for more confident and impress the customers. For others doing their job without meeting too many important people, smart dress is no longer necessary for that performance and productivity.
The staff members are the image of the
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company
that they should be
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well dressed
.
However
,
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some
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people
say that the working quality is more essential. There is a debate between these views, which one is more
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important
?

There are numerous benefits to require employees to
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wear
uniform. They believe that the appearance has a vital effect on the
first
strong impression.
Moreover
, staffs wearing uniform
also
advertise for the
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company
that when
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people
look at the face they will know the workplace name.
Furthermore
, when workers dress as same as their colleagues, there will be less compare between
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people
and
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people
.
In addition
, there are
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some
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people
that should
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wear
elegant clothes such as doctor and businessperson. This might
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
show
off the professional and respect to their customers.

On the other hand
,
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some
workplaces
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
allow
their employees to
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
wear
casual clothes and I can understand your point of views. According to freelancers, the activities
usually
no need to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
meet
face to face,
especially
the clients. This type
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a workers
prefer focusing on their productivity than the looking. There are
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a large number of
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companies
might say that
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different
and
Possible spelling mistake. 'colourful' is British English.
colourful
outfits could boost more creativity and development.
Also
, workers will pay less time for choosing and changing clothes. One example is Facebook, which is a
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
big
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company
in the world,
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
let
their staff members
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
wear
whatever they want.

Overall
, in my opinion, I believe that both these views depend on the nature of the work. If employees who
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
have to
work
directly
with clients, they will need a
This word is normally spelled with hyphen.
good looking
for more confident and impress the customers. For others doing their job without meeting too
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
many
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
important
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
, smart dress is no longer necessary for that performance and productivity.
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes

IELTS essay Nowadays people buy a lot of things even though they don’t really need them. Why is it happening, in your opinion? Is it a positive or negative trend for the individual and the society? v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
290 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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