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tpo8. task2. State whether you agree or disagree with the following statement. Then explain your reasons, using specific details in your explanation. Learning through online courses is more effective than learning in the traditional classroom setting. v.1

tpo8. task2. State whether you agree or disagree with the following statement. Then explain your reasons, using specific details in your explanation. Learning through online courses is more effective than learning in the traditional classroom setting. v. 1
In the contemporary era, it is often argued that games played in all forms of media are more effective and also dangerous. I strongly agree with this opinion and this essay will state my point of view about computer games. The most compelling reason for holding my aspect is that these online games big motivations for children’s to improve their knowledge. There are many online games such as counting trees, Mons world, hello maths and puzzle games are very useful for kids to understand deeply. The Asian countries are a prime example, where the literacy rate climbed up from 80% to 90 % in the year 2010 and 2011. As a result, this will be more beneficial for parents to increase the learning ability. Another reason for my aspect is that the maths school teachers educate their students with their own game application and which also helps students to perform home based learning activities. In addition, many school management also recommend few games in order for students to think logically and apply their skills. However, this kind of approach by schools will also increase the revenues of the online computer games company computer games company. A final reason in support of my viewpoint is that many online companies subsidies the price for the people who refer their games for other peoples. Furthermore, the famous platform Android gives access to key contents most importantly for educational contents which is really useful for educational advancement. In conclusion, I totally agree with this opinion about that computer games always have an educational benefit. This is because of computer games has an ability to increase their knowledge, additionally and also a better solution for educational environment. Given this situation, it is recommended that government around the world should think about implementing this form of education.
In the contemporary era, it is
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often
argued that
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games
played in all forms of media are more effective and
also
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dangerous
. I
strongly
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agree
with this opinion and this essay will state my point of view about computer games.

The most compelling reason for holding my aspect is that these
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online
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games
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big
motivations for children’s to
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improve
their knowledge. There are
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many
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online
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games
such as counting trees, Mons world, hello
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maths
and puzzle
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games
are
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very
useful for kids to understand
deeply
. The Asian countries are a prime example, where the literacy rate climbed up from 80% to 90 % in the year 2010 and 2011.
As a result
, this will be more beneficial for parents to increase the learning ability.

Another reason for my aspect is that the
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maths
school teachers educate their students with their
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own
game application and which
also
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helps
students to perform home based learning activities.
In addition
,
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many
school management
also
recommend few
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games
in order for students to
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think
logically
and apply their
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skills
.
However
, this kind of approach by schools will
also
increase the revenues of the
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online
computer
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games
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company
computer
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games
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company
.

A final reason in support of my viewpoint is that
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many
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online
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companies
subsidies the price for the
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people
who refer their
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games
for other peoples.
Furthermore
, the
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famous
platform Android gives access to key contents most
importantly
for
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educational
contents which is
really
useful for
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educational
advancement.

In conclusion
, I
totally
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agree
with this opinion about that computer
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games
always have an
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educational
benefit. This is
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because
of computer
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games
has an ability to increase their knowledge,
additionally
and
also
a better solution for
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educational
environment.
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Given
this situation, it
is recommended
that
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government
around the world should
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think
about implementing this form of education.
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IELTS essay tpo8. task2. State whether you agree or disagree with the following statement. Then explain your reasons, using specific details in your explanation. Learning through online courses is more effective than learning in the traditional classroom setting. v. 1

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
301 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
  • ?
    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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