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You have been offered a job that will require you to move to a city that you have never visited before. You have a friend who lives there. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter 1) Explain your situation 2) Say why you feel unsure about living in th v.1

You have been offered a job that will require you to move to a city that you have never visited before. You have a friend who lives there. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter 1) Explain your situation 2) Say why you feel unsure about living in th v. 1
Television is more commonly viewed at homes and at different places. Although certain individual think that teenager must not view television as it is bad. Whereas, opponent think it is useful for teenagers. In my opinion, I completely support the later notion because it enhances their learning. On the one hand, People are thinking that television is beneficial to students because it improve learning and I agree. Often teachers in the school are using traditional methods of teaching using workbooks and explaining entire class. There are some student who are smart and are comfortable in learning and there are other who finds difficulty in understanding the concept in a few minutes for them in today's world they are plethora of education program broadcasted on the television. Where they can view their topic subject and learn throughout which was incomplete in the classroom. For instance, In India, There are various channels available where they telecast live class for different grades and by watching it again juvenile can complete the understanding. On the other hand, Individuals believe allowing children to see television has negative impact on students because of violence programs. Now a day’s program available on various television platforms is uncensored, Films for adults are available on various movie channels and in addition there are on-going wars in various parts of the world. All the news channels are reporting live from this war tone zone. The teenager must not be offered to view as this can have a bad effect on their mental health. Hence this is not preferable for children viewing. For instance, In USA mall shooting last year, the adolescent was radicalized by watching various news on television and hence he takes on a weapon to kill people. This was because of watching the news. In conclusion, while people vary in their opinions. I strongly agree in allowing children to view learning program on the television. Young brain is a fast learner hence parents must ensure that they are cautiously while watching any programs together with the children.
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view
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as it is
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. Whereas, opponent
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teenagers
. In my opinion, I completely support the later notion
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because
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improve
learning and I
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agree
.
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class
. There are
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some
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who are smart and are comfortable in learning and there are
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who finds difficulty in understanding the concept in a few minutes for them in
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today
's world they are plethora of education
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program
broadcasted on the
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television
. Where they can
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view
their topic subject and learn throughout which was incomplete in the classroom.
For instance
, In India, There are
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various
channels available where they telecast
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live
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class
for
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different
grades and by watching it again juvenile can complete the understanding.

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, Individuals believe allowing
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children
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see
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television
has
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impact on students
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because
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programs
.
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a day’s
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program
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various
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television
platforms
is uncensored
, Films for adults are available on
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various
movie channels and
in addition
there are
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on-going
wars in
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various
parts of the world. All the news channels are reporting
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live
from this war tone zone. The
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teenager
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must
not
be offered
to
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view
as this can have a
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bad
effect on their mental health.
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Hence
this is not preferable for
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children
viewing.
For instance
, In USA mall shooting last year, the adolescent
was radicalized
by watching
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various
news on
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television
and
hence
he takes on a weapon to kill
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people
. This was
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because
of watching the news.

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, while
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people
vary in their opinions. I
strongly
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agree
in allowing
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children
to
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view
learning
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program
on the
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television
. Young brain is a
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fast
learner
hence
parents
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must
ensure that they are
cautiously
while watching any
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programs
together with the
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children
.
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes

IELTS essay You have been offered a job that will require you to move to a city that you have never visited before. You have a friend who lives there. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter 1) Explain your situation 2) Say why you feel unsure about living in th v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
339 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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