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TPO4 Task2Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? In twenty years there will be fewer cars in use than are today. v.2

TPO4 Task2 In twenty years there will be fewer cars in use than are today. v. 2
Some people believe because cars have some negative effects on life styles they would be eliminated in the near future. On the other hand, some other think car companies will develop their products to be adapted with new situations. Nowadays there are some concerns about cars related to limitation of streets and parking lots and some people prefer to don' t use cars because of these kind of problems. In my opinion, government will be more serious about expanding streets and parking lots because they can' t substitute any other device for cars. For instance they may force all new buildings to have enough parking lots and ban parking cars in the streets to ensure there are adequate space for cars to across. So by these kind of activities mentioned concerns will be solved and people will find cars the best option again. Moreover, the environmental effect is one of the most significant disadvantages of cars and if this don' t be solved it will dramatically decrease the penchant of using cars. In fact, cars pollute the weather and today there are many environment friends against cars and they really want governments to find a solution for this issue. However, the science is improving every moment and scientists are trying to make cars less destructive for environment. For example, scientists are innovating some new materials to replace them with traditional fuels in order to diminish cars weather pollution. It is crystal clear with these kind of innovations we will have some modern cars in the new future that will have the least possible negative effects on environment so the number of cars won' t decrease. Car companies gain a fair amount of money and car production is one of the most successful industries and there are many people who benefit directly of it. With these great interests car companies will try hard to upgrade their cars and persuade people to buy a car. For instance, modern cars don' t need a driver at all and they offer the most possible options to provide a convenient travel for people. So in this way picturesquely if the number of cars doesn' t increase we can say certainly it won' t decrease. Although there are many concerns against cars, car companies won' t give up and they will try to show cars are the best option in every time. It is their job to persuade people that the advantages of cars hundred percent outweigh their disadvantages. In this way we will see modern cars with the least negative points and their quantity won' t diminish.
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Some
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people
believe
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because
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cars
have
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some
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negative
effects on life styles they would
be eliminated
in the near future.
On the other hand
,
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some
other
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think
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car
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companies
will develop their products to
be adapted
with
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new
situations.

Nowadays there are
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some
concerns about
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cars
related to limitation of streets and
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
parking
lots and
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some
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people
prefer to
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don&
#039; t
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use
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cars
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because
of
Did you mean "this kind" or "these kinds"?
these kind
of problems. In my opinion,
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
government
will be more serious about expanding streets and
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
parking
lots
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because
they
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can&
#039; t substitute any other device for
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cars
. For
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instance they
may force all
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new
buildings to have
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enough
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parking
lots and ban
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parking
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cars
in the streets to ensure there are adequate space for
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cars
to across.
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So
by
Did you mean "this kind" or "these kinds"?
these kind
of activities mentioned concerns will
be solved
and
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people
will find
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
cars
the best option again.

Moreover
, the environmental effect is one of the most significant disadvantages of
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cars
and if this
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don&
#039; t
be solved
it will
dramatically
decrease the penchant of using
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cars
. In fact,
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cars
pollute the weather and
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
today
there are
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many
environment friends against
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cars and
they
really
want
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governments
to find a solution for this issue.
However
, the science is improving every moment and scientists are trying to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
make
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cars
less destructive for environment.
For example
, scientists are innovating
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some
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new
materials to replace them with traditional fuels in order to diminish
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cars
weather pollution. It is crystal
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clear
with
Did you mean "this kind" or "these kinds"?
these kind
of innovations we will have
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some
modern
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cars
in the
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new
future that will have the least possible
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negative
effects on environment
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so
the number of
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cars
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won&
#039; t decrease.

Car
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companies
gain a
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fair
amount of money and
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car
production is one of the most successful industries and there are
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many
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people
who benefit
directly
of it. With these great interests
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car
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companies
will try
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hard
to upgrade their
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cars
and persuade
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people
to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
buy
a
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car
.
For instance
, modern
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cars
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don&
#039; t need a driver at
Use a comma before 'and' if it connects two independent clauses (unless they are closely connected and short).
all and
they offer the most possible options to provide
Uncountable nouns are usually not used with an indefinite article. Use simply "convenient travel".
a convenient travel
for
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people
.
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So
in this way
picturesquely
if the number of
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cars
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doesn&
#039; t increase we can say
certainly
it
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won&
#039; t decrease.

Although there are
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many
concerns against
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cars
,
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car
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companies
Possible spelling mistake found.
won&
#039; t give
Use a comma before 'and' if it connects two independent clauses (unless they are closely connected and short).
up and
they will try to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
show
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
cars
are the best option in every time. It is their job to persuade
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
that the advantages of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
cars
Use "a hundred" or use a number before 'hundred'.
hundred
percent outweigh their disadvantages. In this way we will
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
see
modern
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cars
with the least
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negative
points and their quantity
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won&
#039; t diminish.
6Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
46Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
18Mistakes

IELTS essay TPO4 Task2 In twenty years there will be fewer cars in use than are today. v. 2

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
432 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 5.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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