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Some people enjoy living in a location that has warm climate all year. Other people like to live in a place where seasons change. Which type of climate do you prefer and why? use specific reasons reasons and examples to support your opinion. v.1

Some people enjoy living in a location that has warm climate all year. Other people like to live in a place where seasons change. Which type of climate do you prefer and why? use specific reasons reasons and examples to support your opinion. v. 1
There has been many debates of which type of accommodation is the best to live in. While some choose to reside in a house, others think that living in a flat offers more benefits. In my opinion, I think that living at home can bring more problems compared to any advantages it might bring. Admittedly, there are some basic benefits of residing in a house, which are privacy and space. In other words, as home properties are often built with several rooms such as a bedroom, kitchen or living room, home dwellers are able to do any tasks without being disturbed by others. Additionally, due to its massive space, homeowners will be able to store any of their appliances and belongings in multiple places like in the attic or garage. Hence, unlike apartments, a house offers the benefit of quietness and spacious area to its residents. Nevertheless, despite the advantages above, I believe that there are some drawbacks of living in a house. One potentially dangerous problem is security. Since houses often are only protected with traditional padded locks, many burglars can easily break into the residence at any given time. Another obvious issue is its distant location from central business districts. This is because of the fact that city centres are already occupied with high-rise buildings for offices and businesses, thus forcing home properties to be placed further from the city. This is a concern as it requires home dwellers to travel long hours to get to their residence. In conclusion, I believe that being vulnerable to thieves and its remote location far outweighs any minor benefits that could result from living at home.
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debates of which type of accommodation is the best to
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in. While
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choose to reside in a
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house
, others
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living
in a flat offers more
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benefits
. In my opinion, I
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think
that
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living
at home can bring more problems compared to any advantages it might bring.

Admittedly
, there are
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some
basic
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benefits
of residing in a
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house
, which are privacy and space.
In other words
, as home properties are
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often
built with several rooms such as a bedroom, kitchen or
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living
room, home dwellers are able to do any tasks without
being disturbed
by others.
Additionally
, due to its massive space, homeowners will be able to store any of their appliances and belongings in multiple places like in the attic or garage.
Hence
, unlike apartments, a
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house
offers the
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benefit
of quietness and spacious area to its residents.

Nevertheless
, despite the advantages above, I believe that there are
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some
drawbacks of
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living
in a
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house
. One
potentially
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dangerous
problem is security. Since
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houses
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often
are
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only
protected with traditional padded locks,
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many
burglars can
easily
break into the residence at any
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given
time. Another obvious issue is its distant location from central business districts. This is
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because of the fact that
city
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centres
are already occupied with high-rise buildings for offices and businesses,
thus
forcing home properties to
be placed
further
from the city. This is a concern as it requires home dwellers to travel long hours to
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get
to their residence.

In conclusion
, I believe that being vulnerable to thieves and its remote location far outweighs any minor
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benefits
that could result from
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living
at home.
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IELTS essay Some people enjoy living in a location that has warm climate all year. Other people like to live in a place where seasons change. Which type of climate do you prefer and why? use specific reasons reasons and examples to support your opinion. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
275 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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