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4 Some people enjoy living in a location that has a warm climate all year Other people like to live in a place where the seasons change Which type of climate do you prefer and why v.1

4 Some people enjoy living in a location that has a warm climate all year Other people like to live in a place where the seasons change Which type of climate do you prefer and why v. 1
With the latest advancements in science and technology, numerous people across the world have become tech-savvy and make use of online portals like FlipKart and Amazon to purchase things about their needs. However, there are some drawbacks of that as well. In this essay, I intend to delve into the pros and cons of doing purchase over internet. There are a myriad of benefits associated with buying things online. Firstly, it saves your precious time, which otherwise would get wasted going to the market and spend hours in purchasing something. Secondly, online portals run numerous promotional programs time to time, especially during festive seasons, which helps the customers in saving the money by getting discounts on their favourite products. Furthermore, it provides you multiple payment options like cash, credit card, Paytm and Debit card. Then, they have a proper refund policy, in case you are not satisfied with the product, you can either ask for an exchange or refund. For Instance, In a recent survey of people, it has observed that people tend to buy more over the internet during the festive season as compared to local market shopping. On the other hand, internet shopping has many disadvantages as well. Due to the increasing popularity of online shopping, a plethora of businesses already closed down and some are on the verge of getting close soon. Hence, results in unemployment. Furthermore, sometimes the product delivered a not a genuine product instead a copy of that. Then, there are cases of data theft, where these portals share your confidential personal information with other businesses for the sake of money. To illustrate, according to recent reports of CBI, it has been noticed that there has been a sharp increase in the number of data theft cases. To conclude, purchasing things online has both pros and cons, but, advantages completely outweighs the disadvantages.
With the latest advancements in science and technology, numerous
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
across the world have become tech-savvy and
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make
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use
of
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online
portals like
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FlipKart
and Amazon to
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purchase
things about their needs.
However
, there are
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some
drawbacks of that
as well
. In this essay, I intend to delve into the pros and cons of doing
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purchase
over internet.

There are a
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myriad
of benefits associated with buying things
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online
.
Firstly
, it saves your precious time, which
otherwise
would
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get
wasted going to the market and spend hours in purchasing something.
Secondly
,
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
online
portals run numerous promotional programs time to time,
especially
during festive seasons, which
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
helps
the customers in saving the money by getting discounts on their
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favourite
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products
.
Furthermore
, it provides you multiple payment options like cash, credit card,
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Paytm
and Debit card. Then, they have a proper refund policy, in case you are not satisfied with the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
product
, you can either
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
ask for
an exchange or refund.
For Instance
, In a recent survey of
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
, it has observed that
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
tend to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
buy
more over the internet during the festive season as compared to local market shopping.

On the other hand
, internet shopping has
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
many
disadvantages
as well
. Due to the increasing popularity of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
online
shopping, a plethora of businesses already closed down and
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
are on the verge of getting close
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
soon
.
Hence
, results in unemployment.
Furthermore
,
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sometimes
the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
product
delivered a not a genuine
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
product
instead
a copy of that. Then, there are cases of data theft, where these portals share your confidential personal information with other businesses for the sake of money.

To illustrate, according to recent reports of CBI, it has
been noticed
that there has been a sharp increase in the number of data theft cases.

To conclude
, purchasing things
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
online
has both pros and cons,
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
but
, advantages completely outweighs the disadvantages.
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7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes

IELTS essay 4 Some people enjoy living in a location that has a warm climate all year Other people like to live in a place where the seasons change Which type of climate do you prefer and why v. 1

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
309 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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