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TPO33 task2 Do you agree or disagree with the following statement When teachers assign projects on which students must work together the students learn much moreeffectively than when they are asked to work alone on projects v.2

TPO33 task2 When teachers assign projects on which students must work together the students learn much moreeffectively than when they are asked to work alone on projects v. 2
Independent working and team working always server as twin towers in problem solving. Both of them pave for the way to success. Under this circumstance, no wonder people will generate the incessant argument that which one is better. From my perspective, I believe the latter one is more effective in studying. First and the foremost, one man’s thought is often far less shining compared to the idea from a group of people. That is to say, one student cannot take all the factors of the assignment into account. On the other hand, a group of students can scrutinize the assignment from multiple dimensions. Therefore, they would make less mistakes through this process, and once the number of mistakes was reduced, their working effectiveness and speed of learning would definitely be promoted. Thus, they would learn much more in this process. Furthermore, the fact that student can learn from each other indicates that group working is more reasonable than working alone. If one student have some questions that cannot be solved by himself, others would address it immediately. Similarly, if one student had some groundbreaking ideas, others could learn much from it. Take the case of myself as example. I work with a team whose team members are focusing on an assignment of robot. I must say it would be entirely impossible for me to finish this assignment within a week alone, given that I have no experience in this field. However, thanks to my team member, I learn enormous knowledge from this project, every time I have some questions they will answer me as quickly as possible. Therefore, I learnt how to program a robot only in 3 days, and made some breakthrough with my teammates. Nevertheless, I have to confess that working alone do have many pros. For instance, student can learn a lot in independent working. One the other hand, team working also have some disadvantages, like some people might rely on others and just do nothing in this team. However, I still hold the idea that in most of the situation, team working is a better choice than working alone. Because in team working, student don' t just learn about the knowledge associated with the assignment but also the ability to coordinate themselves with others in their future jobs. This is an indispensable ability in our society nowadays. In a nutshell, I maintain the idea that assigning student into groups to finish their project can help them learn much more effectively than ask them do their job alone. And I believe my opponents will compromise after being exposed to my article.
Independent
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working
and
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team
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working
always server as twin towers in problem solving. Both of them pave for the way to success. Under this circumstance, no wonder
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people
will generate the incessant argument that which one is better. From my perspective, I believe the latter one is more effective in studying.

First
and the foremost, one
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man
’s
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thought
is
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often
far less shining compared to the
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idea
from a
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group
of
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people
.
That is
to say, one
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student
cannot take all the factors of the
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assignment
into account. On the
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other
hand, a
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group
of
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students
can scrutinize the
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assignment
from multiple dimensions.
Therefore
, they would
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make
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less
mistakes through this process, and once the number of mistakes was
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reduced
, their
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working
effectiveness and speed of learning would definitely
be promoted
.
Thus
, they would
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learn
much more in this process.

Furthermore
, the fact that
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student
can
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learn
from each
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other
indicates that
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group
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working
is more reasonable than
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working
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alone
. If one
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student
have
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some
questions that cannot
be solved
by himself, others would address it immediately.
Similarly
, if one
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student
had
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some
groundbreaking
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ideas
, others could
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learn
much from it. Take the case of myself as example. I work with a
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team
whose
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team
members are focusing on an
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assignment
of robot. I
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must
say it would be
entirely
impossible for me to finish this
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assignment
within a week
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alone
,
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given
that I have no experience in this field.
However
, thanks to my
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team
member, I
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learn
enormous knowledge from this project, every time I have
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some
questions they will answer me as
quickly
as possible.
Therefore
, I
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learnt
how to program a robot
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only
in 3 days, and made
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some
breakthrough with my teammates.

Nevertheless
, I
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have to
confess that
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working
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alone
do have
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many
pros.
For instance
,
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student
can
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learn
a lot in independent
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working
.
Did you mean "on"?
One
the
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other
hand,
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team
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working
also
have
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some
disadvantages, like
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some
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people
might rely on others and
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just
do nothing in this
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team
.
However
, I
still
hold the
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idea
that in most of the situation,
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team
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working
is a better choice than
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working
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alone
.
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Because
in
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team
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working
,
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student
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don&
#039; t
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just
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learn
about the knowledge associated with the
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assignment
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but
also
the ability to coordinate themselves with others in their future jobs. This is an indispensable ability in our society nowadays.

In a nutshell, I maintain the
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idea
that assigning
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student
into
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groups
to finish their project can
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help
them
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learn
much more
effectively
than ask them do their job
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
alone
. And I believe my opponents will compromise after
being exposed
to my article.
17Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
55Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
4Mistakes

IELTS essay TPO33 task2 When teachers assign projects on which students must work together the students learn much moreeffectively than when they are asked to work alone on projects v. 2

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
434 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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