Do you want to improve your writing? Try our new evaluation service and get detailed feedback.
Check Your Text it's free

TPO29Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? To improve the quality of education, universities should spend more money on salaries for university professors. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer. v.2

TPO29 To improve the quality of education, universities should spend more money on salaries for university professors. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer. v. 2
Without any shadow of doubt, the quality of education plays an undeniable/striking role in headway of every society. A controversial question is that whether increasing the salary of the university professors promote the level of education or not. Some people are inclined towards that high income of academic members would have the positive effect on promoting the quality of education, while others believe this option does not practical. I do find the idea of the former group more in accordance with that of mine; to support my stands, in the course of this essay, I aptly substantiate my viewpoints. To begin with, paying attention to the professors' salary could provide a circumstance to enhance the level of the university. It is crystal clear that professors are not only the fabric of the university, but also the prime of the society. In this way, universities could absorb more sophisticated and skilled professors, and this brings about that more talented students penchant to attend these universities and enjoy the high qualified staffs' knowledge. As an example, I would like to mention my own experience, several years ago, when I wanted to choose the university, while I had got admission of many top and high ranking universities in my country, I chose Tabriz University because of a well-known professor who was there. In the light of the aforementioned arguments, I can say that offering high wage to professors could help to improve the level of the collages. Another reason which deserves to say some words here is that high wage could be a decent element to motivate professors and inspire unexpected boost in their career. Suffice to say that reasonable salary could pave the way towards the build the constructive competition among the academic members. It is witnessed that well-paid/highly-paid individuals often persuade into their tasks more than others, no matter who they are, this policy would be workable to prospers either future career of the students and improving quality of university. To illustrate my point, I want to mention some statistics. The results of the survey which is recently conducted in my country express that in any university which its professors are satisfied about their salary, are more enthusiasm and this leads the society to prominent headway. Enthusiastic professors are able to make their students enthusiastic about their field too, and this inspired the students to learn more. In brief, contemplating all the aforementioned reasons, one soon realizes that spending more money about professors' salary closely tied the prosperous of not only the university, but also the society. Since benefits of this perspective clearly outweigh its disadvantages; I would strongly advocate the fact that high salary would be practical factor for improving of quality of education.
Without any shadow of doubt, the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
quality
of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
education
plays an undeniable/striking role in headway of every
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
society
. A controversial question is that whether increasing the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
salary
of the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
university
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
professors
promote the level of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
education
or not.
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
Some
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
are inclined
towards that
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
high
income of academic members would have the
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
positive
effect on promoting the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
quality
of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
education
, while others believe this option does not practical. I do find the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
idea
of the former group more in accordance with that of mine; to support my stands, in the course of this essay, I
aptly
substantiate my viewpoints.

To
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
begin
with, paying attention to the
Possible spelling mistake found.
professors&
#039;
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
salary
could provide a circumstance to enhance the level of the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
university
. It is crystal
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
clear
that
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
professors
are not
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
only
the fabric of the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
university
,
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
but
also
the prime of the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
society
. In this way,
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
universities
could absorb more sophisticated and skilled
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
professors
, and this brings about that more talented
Apostrophe might be missing. Did you mean "students'" or "student's"?
students
penchant to attend these
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
universities
and enjoy the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
high
qualified
Possible spelling mistake found.
staffs&
#039; knowledge. As an example, I would like to mention my
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
own
experience, several years ago, when I wanted to choose the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
university
, while I had
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
got
admission of
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
many
top and
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
high
ranking
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
universities
in my country, I chose Tabriz
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
University
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
because
of a well-known
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
professor
who was there. In the light of the aforementioned arguments, I can say that offering
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
high
wage to
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
professors
could
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
help
to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
improve
the level of the collages.

Another reason which deserves to say
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
words here is that
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
high
wage could be a decent element to motivate
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
professors
and inspire unexpected boost in their career. Suffice to say that reasonable
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
salary
could pave the way towards the build the constructive competition among the academic members. It
is witnessed
that well-paid/
highly
-paid individuals
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
often
persuade into their tasks more than others, no matter who they are, this policy would be
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
workable
to prospers either future career of the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
students
and improving
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
quality
of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
university
. To illustrate my point, I want to mention
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
statistics. The results of the survey which is recently conducted in my country express that in any
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
university
which its
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
professors
are satisfied
about their
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
salary
, are more enthusiasm and this leads the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
society
to prominent headway. Enthusiastic
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
professors
are able to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
make
their
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
students
enthusiastic about their field too, and this inspired the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
students
to learn more.

In brief
, contemplating all the aforementioned reasons, one
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
soon
realizes that spending more money about
Possible spelling mistake found.
professors&
#039;
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
salary
closely
tied
The phrase 'the prosperous of' is not correct. Use a noun, not an adjective, between 'the' and 'of'.
the prosperous of
not
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
only
the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
university
,
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
but
also
the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
society
. Since benefits of this perspective
clearly
outweigh its disadvantages; I would
strongly
advocate the fact that
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
high
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
salary
would be practical factor for improving of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
quality
of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
education
.
7Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
49Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
5Mistakes

IELTS essay TPO29 To improve the quality of education, universities should spend more money on salaries for university professors. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer. v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
454 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
  • ?
    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
Labels Descriptions
  • ?
    Currently is not available
  • Meet the criteria
  • Doesn't meet the criteria
Similar posts


Recent posts