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TPO28 - Q4Explain how the example of the television advertisement for pots and pans from the lecture illustrates the technique of refute-and-persuade. v.1

TPO28 - Q4Explain how the example of the television advertisement for pots and pans from the lecture illustrates the technique of refute-and-persuade. v. 1
Nowadays, technology is our unconditional partner for many daily tasks. Whether the development of home machines brigs more advantages or disadvantages is a discussion that sparked controversy. In my opinion, there are many more advantages for using devices that improve people’s life by giving more free time and also better-quality results. With automatic processes at home, people can spend more free time with their families and friends. Along with new technological developments, there is always the possibility to simple set up a timer or easily program a task, disregard and came back later after finishing other kind activities such as reading, watching TV, among others. For example, an automatic vacuum cleaner cleans up an entire room or house in minutes and return to its charger base, while parents spend more time with their kids and family. Besides, devices such as automatic dishwashers, vindicate the possibility to spend more time in the table with guests or partners after dinner, instead of wasting time by cleaning up the mess of a kitchen. Secondly, home activities are more efficient and quality results might be better by using automatic tools. Although, people can spend many hours on some home tasks and made them so carefully, the results of using machines might be better in quality terms. From my experience, I have noticed that using a washing machine gives me much better results when cleaning my clothes in one third of the time. Furthermore, activities such as cooking specially chopping, can be easy by using machines without wasting part of the food that normally happen when it is done by hand. In conclusion, technological developments for home tasks brings more advantages in people´s live. They allow to have more free time to share with others and helps to complete things with a better-quality result. Technology development of home machines arrived and is here to help people by making their life quite easier than in the past few years.
Nowadays, technology is our unconditional partner for
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. Whether the
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development
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brigs more advantages or disadvantages is a discussion that sparked controversy. In my opinion, there are
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many
more advantages for using devices that
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improve
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people’s
life by giving more free
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time
and
also
better-quality results.

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automatic
processes at home,
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people
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spend
more free
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time
with their families and friends. Along with new technological
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developments
, there is always the possibility to simple set up a timer or
easily
program a
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task
, disregard and came back later after finishing other kind activities such as reading, watching TV, among others.
For example
, an
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automatic
vacuum cleaner cleans up an entire room or
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house
in minutes and return to its charger base, while parents
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spend
more
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time
with their kids and family.
Besides
, devices such as
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automatic
dishwashers, vindicate the possibility to
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spend
more
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time
in the table with guests or partners after dinner,
instead
of wasting
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time
by cleaning up the mess of a kitchen.

Secondly
, home activities are more efficient and quality
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results
might be better by using
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automatic
tools. Although,
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people
can
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spend
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many
hours on
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home
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tasks
and made them
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so
carefully
, the
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results
of using
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machines
might be better in quality terms. From my experience, I have noticed that using a washing
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machine
gives me much better
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results
when cleaning my clothes in one third of the
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time
.
Furthermore
, activities such as cooking
specially
chopping, can be easy by using
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machines
without wasting part of the food that
normally
happen when it
is done
by hand.

In conclusion
, technological
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developments
for home
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tasks
brings more advantages in
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live
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allow
to have more free
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time
to share with others and
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helps
to complete things with a better-quality
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result
. Technology
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development
of home
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machines
arrived and is here to
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help
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people
by making their life quite easier than in the past few years.
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IELTS essay TPO28 - Q4Explain how the example of the television advertisement for pots and pans from the lecture illustrates the technique of refute-and-persuade. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
323 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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