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Explain how the example of the television advertisement for pots and pans from the lecture illustrates the technique of refute-and-persuade. v.1

Explain how the example of the television advertisement for pots and pans from the lecture illustrates the technique of refute-and-persuade. v. 1
In some areas around the world, there has always been a lack of fresh water, but this is now a global problem due to the growth in worldwide demand. Several factors have led to this increase, but there are measures that governments and individuals can take to solve this problem. One could think that the most important reason is wasting water. This is happening through the usage of much water for agricultural purposes, industry and lots of other consumptions. In addition, population is growing around the world as well as water consuming. Plenty of water is used for provision system and farming. I think that global warming is another vital cause of increasing demand for fresh water. Because evaporation of the ocean and seawater and drying of the Earth's crust cause to exceed the demand for water. For instance, the Aral Sea has lost most of its territory over the last 50years. When it comes to solutions of this problem, above mentioned, governments should set up demographic policy and manufacturing reusable products. Likewise, individuals can also respond to this issue. In my point of view, children should be taught ethics of the usage of water efficiently. It would have greatly contributed to solving the problem if it will be under control. To sum up, it is evident that although a number of factors are resulting in an increased demand for water, solutions to tackle the problem are available to governments and individuals. It is imperative that the issue be resolved as soon as possible to avoid the potential dangers to mankind that the lack of fresh water would bring.
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some
areas around the world, there has always been a lack of fresh
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water
,
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but
this is
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now
a global
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problem
due to the growth in worldwide
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demand
. Several factors have led to this increase,
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but
there are measures that
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governments
and individuals can take to solve this problem.

One could
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think
that the most
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important
reason is wasting
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water
. This is happening through the usage of much
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water
for agricultural purposes, industry and lots of other
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consumptions
.
In addition
, population is growing around the world
as well
as
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water
consuming.
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Plenty
of
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water
is
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used
for provision system and farming. I
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think
that global warming is another vital cause of increasing
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demand
for fresh
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water
.
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Because
evaporation of the ocean and seawater and drying of the Earth's crust cause to exceed the
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demand
for
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water
.
For instance
, the Aral Sea has lost most of its territory over the last 50years.

When it
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comes
to solutions of this
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problem
, above mentioned,
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governments
should set up demographic policy and manufacturing reusable products.
Likewise
, individuals can
also
respond to this issue. In my point of view, children should
be taught
ethics of the usage of
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water
efficiently
. It would have
greatly
contributed to solving the
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problem
if it will be under control.

To sum up, it is evident that although a number of factors are resulting in an increased
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demand
for
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
water
, solutions to tackle the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
problem
are available to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
governments
and individuals. It is imperative that the issue
be resolved
as
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soon
as possible to avoid the potential
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dangers
to mankind that the lack of fresh
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water
would bring.
7Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7Mistakes
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IELTS essay Explain how the example of the television advertisement for pots and pans from the lecture illustrates the technique of refute-and-persuade. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
269 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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