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TPO23- Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? In today’s world, it is more important to work quickly and risk making mistakes than to work slowly and make sure that everything is correct. Use specific reasons and examples to support your v.2

TPO23- In today’s world, it is more important to work quickly and risk making mistakes than to work slowly and make sure that everything is correct. Use specific reasons and examples to support your v. 2
In today' s progressive and competitive world where we live, no one can turn a blind eye to the significant effects of completing works and affairs properly on people' s lives. In this regard, some are inclined toward the opinion that fulfilling duties quickly and taking risks in accomplishing tasks is important for people. On the other extreme of the rope, others think that doing tasks slowly and being sure that everything is correct without any risk has reliable results. Although both sides take their own positions, personally speaking, I firmly believe that the latter group carries more weight. In the following paragraphs, I will cogently explain my reasons to justify my viewpoints. As the first and paramount reason, taking a risk in doing tasks and duties leads to unreliable and destructive results which can affect negatively individuals' lives. To be more specific, when people fulfilling their works quickly, they will be more likely to make big mistakes because they cannot concentrate effectively on their tasks; therefore, they cannot pay attention to essential details efficiently. In this situation, they will cause irreparable problems having negative influences on others' lives. For instance, if constructive engineers design buildings quickly and do not consider scientific facts, they will construct unreliable buildings not resisting natural disasters such as earthquakes and floods. Hence, the more slowly individuals work and the more become ensured that everything is efficient and correct, the better outcomes they can obtain remarkably which do not threaten people' s lives. The second reason coming to my mind to substantiate my viewpoint is that working steadily and in a slow manner with high concentration can boost individuals' self-confidence significantly, which can help them to show productive and consistent performance in their future. In other words, if people try to fulfill their tasks quickly, they will experience numerous and frequent failures and disappointing experiments. Consequently, they will be less likely to become successful in getting optimum results. In this line of thought, they will suffer from a lack of sufficient self-esteem and cannot find viable solutions and pragmatic and rational approaches to deal effectively with their problems and unprecedented challenges in vicissitudes of their lives. Take my own experience as a compelling example. When I was a student at a university, I get used to doing my homework quickly. As a result, I always got minimum scores in my exams and lost trust in myself. In fact, since I experienced numerous bad records, I believed that I could not show good performance. Thus, if I tried hard to complete my tasks perfectly and evaluated that everything was correct, I could improve my self-confidence in getting good results. In conclusion, doing tasks and duties slowly and paying attention to all critical details, which guarantees that everything is perfect, leads to more productive and fruitful consequences. Not only do people obtain reliable results, but also they can improve their self-confidence in finding rational and innovative ideas to address their problems properly and efficiently.
In
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today&
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live
, no one can turn a blind eye to the significant effects of completing works and affairs
properly
on
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people&
#039; s
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lives
. In this regard,
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some
are inclined
toward the opinion that fulfilling duties
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quickly
and taking
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risks
in accomplishing
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tasks
is
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important
for
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people
. On the
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other
extreme of the rope, others
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think
that
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doing
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tasks
slowly
and being sure that
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everything
is correct without any
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risk
has reliable
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results
. Although both sides take their
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own
positions,
personally
speaking, I
firmly
believe that the latter group carries more weight. In the following paragraphs, I will
cogently
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explain
my reasons to justify my viewpoints.

As the
first
and paramount reason, taking a
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risk
in
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doing
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tasks
and duties leads to unreliable and destructive
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results
which can affect
negatively
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individuals&
#039;
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lives
. To be more specific, when
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people
fulfilling their works
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quickly
, they will be more likely to
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make
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big
mistakes
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because
they cannot concentrate
effectively
on their
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tasks
;
therefore
, they cannot pay attention to essential
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details
efficiently
. In this situation, they will cause irreparable problems having
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negative
influences on
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others&
#039;
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lives
.
For instance
, if constructive engineers design buildings
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quickly
and do not consider scientific facts, they will construct unreliable buildings not resisting natural disasters such as earthquakes and floods.
Hence
, the more
slowly
individuals work and the more become ensured that
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everything
is efficient and correct, the better outcomes they can obtain
remarkably
which do not threaten
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people&
#039; s
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lives
.

The second reason coming to my mind to substantiate my viewpoint is that working
steadily
and
Consider replacing "in a slow manner" with the adverb for "slow"; e.g., "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
in a slow manner
with high concentration can boost
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individuals&
#039; self-confidence
significantly
, which can
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help
them to
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show
productive and consistent performance in their future. In
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other
words, if
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people
try to fulfill their
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tasks
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quickly
, they will experience numerous and frequent failures and disappointing experiments.
Consequently
, they will be less likely to become successful in getting optimum
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
results
. In this line of
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
thought
, they will suffer from a lack of sufficient self-esteem and cannot find viable solutions and pragmatic and rational approaches to deal
effectively
with their problems and unprecedented challenges in vicissitudes of their
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
lives
. Take my
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
own
experience as a compelling example. When I was a student at a university, I
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get
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used
to
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doing
my homework
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quickly
. As a
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result
, I always
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got
minimum scores in my exams and lost trust in myself. In fact, since I experienced numerous
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
bad
records, I believed that I could not
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show
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good
performance.
Thus
, if I tried
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hard
to complete my
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tasks
perfectly
and evaluated that
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everything
was correct, I could
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improve
my self-confidence in getting
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good
results.

In conclusion
,
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doing
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tasks
and duties
slowly
and paying attention to all critical
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details
, which guarantees that
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everything
is perfect, leads to more productive and fruitful consequences. Not
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only
do
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people
obtain reliable
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results
,
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but
also
they can
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improve
their self-confidence in finding rational and innovative
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ideas
to address their problems
properly
and
efficiently
.
15Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
38Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7Mistakes

IELTS essay TPO23- In today’s world, it is more important to work quickly and risk making mistakes than to work slowly and make sure that everything is correct. Use specific reasons and examples to support your v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
497 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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