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Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? In today's world, it is more important to work quickly and risk making mistakes than to work slowly and make sure that everything is correct. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answ v.231

In today's world, it is more important to work quickly and risk making mistakes than to work slowly and make sure that everything is correct. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answ v. 231
A few people believe that every college student should study their chosen subject as they would perform better. While others postulate that they should solely be permitted to study science and technology subjects that will be beneficial for their future careers. In my opinion, selecting a subject that degree students enjoy is much more important. On the one hand, students pursuing tertiary education should study only those subjects which are interesting for them because they could perform better. This means that their interest level would be at a peak and they could get high marks in class assignments. That is to say that they could obtain profound knowledge of their favourite subjects and could get proficiency which would be helpful to gain entry into their chosen profession. For example, a survey conducted by the Human Resource department and says that ten-percent of employed people in multinational companies who were former degree students possess an exceptional understanding which benefited them to get their job conveniently in a competitive market. On the other hand, all college students should only be allowed to study science and technology subjects as they could get a good employment opportunity. This means that they would obtain extreme information about these subjects at an early age, which could help them to create exceptional inventions in medical research, computer science, and technology areas. Consequently, this leads to more skilled workers would be available in these areas which would invigorate their nations. Both views put forward have their valid points, however, I believe that persuading children to take a subject that they do not like will affect their mentality. For example, teenagers are more stressed facing the class-tests because they do not have the spirit to learn in class to boost and to enrich their competence. Therefore, most of the students did not pass the examination and become unemployed. In conclusion, although studies useful subjects such as science and technology could provide efficient job chances, students should be free to choose their preferred subjects because they would study enthusiastically that affects their result.
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believe that every college
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should
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their chosen
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subject
as they would perform better. While others postulate that they should
solely
be permitted
to
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study
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science
and
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technology
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subjects
that will be beneficial for their future careers. In my opinion, selecting a
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subject
that degree
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students
enjoy is much more
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important
.

On the one hand,
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students
pursuing tertiary education should
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study
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only
those
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subjects
which are interesting for them
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because
they could perform better. This means that their interest level would be at a
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peak and
they could
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get
high marks in
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class
assignments.
That is
to say that they could obtain profound knowledge of their
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favourite
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subjects
and could
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get
proficiency which would be helpful to gain entry into their chosen profession.
For example
, a survey conducted by the Human Resource department and says that ten-percent of employed
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people
in multinational
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companies
who were former degree
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students
possess an exceptional understanding which benefited them to
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get
their job
conveniently
in a competitive market.

On the other hand
, all college
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students
should
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only
be
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to
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study
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science
and
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technology
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subjects
as they could
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get
a
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good
employment opportunity. This means that they would obtain extreme information about these
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subjects
at an early age, which could
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help
them to create exceptional inventions in medical research, computer
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science
, and
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technology
areas.
Consequently
, this leads to more skilled workers would be available in these areas which would invigorate their nations.

Both views put forward have their valid points,
however
, I believe that persuading children to take a
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subject
that they do not like will affect their mentality.
For example
,
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teenagers
are more
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stressed
facing the
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tests
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because
they do not have the spirit to learn in
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class
to boost and to enrich their competence.
Therefore
, most of the
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students
did not pass the examination and become unemployed.

In conclusion
, although
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studies
useful
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subjects
such as
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science
and
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technology
could provide efficient job chances,
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students
should be free to choose their preferred
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subjects
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because
they would
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study
enthusiastically
that affects their result.
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IELTS essay In today's world, it is more important to work quickly and risk making mistakes than to work slowly and make sure that everything is correct. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answ v. 231

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
343 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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