Science and technology are of great importance to humans, as well as music and art. While some are more interested in musicians and artists in the present-day, others show more importance to scientists and technology specialists. I strongly disagree that science and technology are more valued because I believe that people generate a better response towards music and art.
In terms of music, people are able to relate to it on a subjective level, as they have favourite musicians whose songs can communicate exactly how they feel in particular situations. In addition, it is only logical to be attracted by delightful melodies and significant words. When someone is feeling low, they listen to a song with a nice rhythm and as a result they feel better. For example, I personally have a favourite boy band which I listen to whenever I'm in despair, and they always seem to be able to lift up my mood.
With regards to art, time and money are spent by tourists to discover artworks all over the world. Tourism is a very diffuse phenomenon nowadays, as it feeds the curiosity that individuals have about other cultures' monuments and paintings. People who are passionate about the latter also attend displays, in which famous portraits are shown to the public. For instance, I've had a friend who purchased a fine illustration of an artist of the nineteenth century for a huge amount of money.
In conclusion, music and art are of a greater importance in the current days, in opposition to science and technology, as people are willing to travel around the world to discover new worlds and they can aswell relate to an artist on a personal level. 
Science and  
technology
 are of great importance to humans,  
as well
 as  
music
 and art. While  
some
 are more interested in musicians and artists in the present-day, others  
show
 more importance to scientists and  
technology
 specialists. I  
strongly
 disagree that science and  
technology
 are more valued  
because
 I believe that  
people
 generate a better response towards  
music
 and art.
In terms of  
music
,  
people
 are able to relate to it on a subjective level, as they have  
favourite
 musicians whose songs can communicate exactly how they feel  
in particular
 situations.  
In addition
, it is  
only
 logical to  
be attracted
 by delightful melodies and significant words. When someone is feeling low, they listen to a song with a nice rhythm and  
as a result
 they feel better.  
For example
, I  
personally
 have a  
favourite
 boy band which I listen to whenever I'm in despair, and they always seem to be able to  
lift up
 my mood. 
With regards to
 art, time and money  
are spent
 by tourists to discover artworks all over the world. Tourism is a  
very
 diffuse phenomenon nowadays, as it feeds the curiosity that individuals have about other cultures' monuments and paintings.  
People
 who are passionate about the latter  
also
 attend displays, in which  
famous
 portraits  
are shown
 to the public.  
For instance
, I've had a friend who  
purchased
 a fine illustration of an artist of the nineteenth century for a huge amount of money. 
In conclusion
,  
music
 and art are of a greater importance in the  
current
 days, in opposition to science and  
technology
, as  
people
 are willing to travel around the world to discover new  
worlds and
 they can  
aswell
 relate to an artist on a personal level. 
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes