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TPO 22 – task 2: Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Teachers should not make their social or political views known to students in the classroom. v.1

TPO 22 – task 2: Teachers should not make their social or political views known to students in the classroom. v. 1
It is argued by some people that all their earnings should be used for their personal needs and not taxed by the government. I disagree with this notion because taxation ensure equality in many societies and it is a means by which the government provide essential services and infrastructures. One major reason benefit of taxation is that it promote equality. In other words, the tax pay by people in many countries is proportional to their earnings. Thus, high income earners pay more taxes to the authority while with only few exceptions, low income earners and senior citizens pay lesser taxes. For instance, there are high tax on luxury goods commonly use by the affluent in many countries, whereas, individuals who do not have a regular income are excepted from certain taxes. This has resulted in a more even society. Furthermore, taxes are needed for the development of infrastructure and the provision of essential services. This is due to the fact that most governments pay for these public infrastructures and services from tax incomes. For example, in many countries, the state pay for security, health care and social amenities from the tax it receives. Therefore, if the government does not receive tax revenue, it would neither be able to pay for important services nor develop public infrastructure. In conclusion, I disagree with the view that people should keep their income rather than pay tax because taxation ensure equility in many countries and it is the main means governments fund public services and infrastructures. Efforts geared towards promoting these merits should be encouraged.
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is argued
by
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some
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people
that all their earnings should be
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used
for their personal needs and not taxed by the
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government
. I disagree with this notion
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because
taxation ensure equality in
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many
societies and it is a means by which the
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government
provide essential
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services
and infrastructures.

One major reason benefit of taxation is that it promote equality.
In other words
, the
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tax
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pay
by
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people
in
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many
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countries
is proportional to their earnings.
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income
earners
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pay
more
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taxes
to the authority while with
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only
few exceptions, low
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income
earners and senior citizens
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pay
lesser
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.
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, there are high
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on luxury
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goods
commonly
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by the affluent in
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countries
, whereas, individuals who do not have a regular
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income
are excepted
from certain
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taxes
. This has resulted in a more even society.

Furthermore
,
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taxes
are needed
for the development of infrastructure and the provision of essential
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services
.
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governments
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pay
for these public infrastructures and
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services
from
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tax
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incomes
.
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many
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countries
, the state
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for security, health care and social amenities from the
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it receives.
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government
does not receive
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tax
revenue, it would neither be able to
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pay
for
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important
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services
nor develop public infrastructure.

In conclusion
, I disagree with the view that
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people
should
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keep
their
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income
rather
than
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taxation ensure
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equility
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and it is the main means
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fund public
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services
and infrastructures. Efforts geared towards promoting these merits should
be encouraged
.
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IELTS essay TPO 22 – task 2: Teachers should not make their social or political views known to students in the classroom. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
261 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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