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TPO19. Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? In order to be well-informed, a person must get information from many different news resources. v.1

TPO19. In order to be well-informed, a person must get information from many different news resources. v. 1
During the last decades, the digital revolution has altered several facets of the news industry and its means for delivering news to the general public. In fact, today, people can reach not only the latest local news but also the international one in just a second thanks to the high-speed internet. However, this advancement like other developments has brought controversial issues to societies such as numerous news sources which are unreliable. One of the heated debates in this realm is that whether one should get information from different news resources to become well-informed. Although there might be some counterexamples about this claim, deeply deliberating over the issue, I would argue that people should obtain information from as many as different resources they can to become sure. Following reasons will further elaborate on this issue. The most prominent point to be mentioned is that, as a rule, if we want to be well-informed about a particular subject we should approach that topic from different angles. Apart from that, the majority of news agencies all around the world talk about an issue in a biased way, and they can intentionally or even unintentionally change the way readers think. As a result, it is strongly recommended to read or hear about an event from different news resources in order to analyze it objectively. Take my own experience as an example which can shed some light on this issue. A few months ago, I read about a demonstration which was held by Brazilian students against the price increase, even worse; the online news agency added about ten people were killed by the policemen at this protest. Fortunately, I asked my Brazilian friend about this event and he rejected these number of dead people at all. Finally, I have discovered that this specific news resource has had a long-lasting problem with the president of Brazil. The second rationale behind my idea is rooted in the fact that some news resources are more powerful than others. In fact, popular news resources have authority to get even secret information about different topics ranging from international political events to celebrities' personal life. Thus, sometimes, we can get a broader range of knowledge and information from another source of news compared to our local news media. By way of illustration, whenever I cannot get what I am searching for it among our local news resources, I can easily find them in detail through American or European news agencies such as CNN or BBC. To wrap it up, based on the ideas which were presented above, I believe that we can take advantage of today' s plentiful resources of news to judge recent events from different aspects, and obtain them in more detail. However, an important issue that must be mentioned is that we cannot use this opinion as a prescription for everyone and more studies are required to answer this question precisely.
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news
industry and its means for delivering
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news
to the
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general public
. In fact,
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today
,
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people
can reach not
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only
the latest local
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news
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but
also
the international one in
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just
a second thanks to the high-speed internet.
However
, this advancement like other developments has brought controversial
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issues
to societies such as numerous
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news
sources which are unreliable. One of the heated debates in this realm is that whether one should
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get
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information
from
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different
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news
resources to become well-informed. Although there might be
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some
counterexamples about this claim,
deeply
deliberating over the
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issue
, I would argue that
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people
should obtain
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information
from as
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many
as
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different
resources they can to become sure. Following reasons will
further
elaborate on this issue.

The most prominent point to
be mentioned
is that, as a
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rule
, if we want to be well-informed about a particular subject we should approach that topic from
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different
angles. Apart from that, the majority of
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news
agencies all around the world talk about an
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issue
Consider replacing "in a biased way" with the adverb for "biased"; e.g., "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
in a biased way
, and they can
intentionally
or even
unintentionally
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change
the way readers
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think
.
As a result
, it is
strongly
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recommended to read
or hear about an
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event
from
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different
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news
resources in order to analyze it
objectively
. Take my
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own
experience as an example which can shed
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some
light on this
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issue
. A few months ago, I read about a demonstration which
was held
by Brazilian students against the price increase, even worse; the online
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news
agency
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added
about ten
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people
were killed
by the policemen at this protest.
Fortunately
, I asked my Brazilian friend about this
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event and
he rejected these number of dead
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people
at all.
Finally
, I have discovered that this specific
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news
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resource
has had a long-lasting problem with the president of Brazil.

The second rationale behind my
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idea
is rooted
in the fact that
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some
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news
resources are more powerful than others. In fact, popular
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news
resources have authority to
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get
even secret
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information
about
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different
topics ranging from international political
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events
to
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celebrities&
#039; personal life.
Thus
,
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sometimes
, we can
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get
a broader range of knowledge and
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information
from another source of
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news
compared to our local
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news
media. By way of illustration, whenever I cannot
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get
what I am searching for it among our local
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news
resources, I can
easily
find them in detail through American or European
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news
agencies such as CNN or BBC.

To wrap it up, based on the
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ideas
which
were presented
above, I believe that we can take advantage of
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today&
#039; s plentiful resources of
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news
to judge recent
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events
from
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different
aspects, and obtain them in more detail.
However
, an
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important
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issue
that
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must
be mentioned
is that we cannot
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use
this opinion as a prescription for everyone and more studies
are required
to answer this question
precisely
.
9Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
40Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
6Mistakes
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IELTS essay TPO19. In order to be well-informed, a person must get information from many different news resources. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
483 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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