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Nowadays we live in very complex modern life. So, we have to do many and different task to fill our days in fruitful tasks. While, others prefer doing one task in all their day long. And in my point of view doing many tasks is very important to live more v.2

Nowadays we live in very complex modern life. So, we have to do many and different task to fill our days in fruitful tasks. While, others prefer doing one task in all their day long. And in my point of view doing many tasks is very important to live more v. 2
Nowadays we live in very complex modern life. So, we have to do many and different task to fill our days in fruitful tasks. While, others prefer doing one task in all their day long. And in my point of view doing many tasks is very important to live more comfortable and satisfied life. And the impact of my view will analyzed in this essay for further explain. First of all, we should learn doing many tasks in our days for different reasons. firstly, it is very helpful to do many things in the same day, because we can arrange our time in a helpful manner, Also, we can feel more enjoyable with different task. For example, i spent my day all the time between surfing internet to get the maximum benefit in my studying, and talking with my friends to change my mod and decrease my stress level. Moreover, doing my homework and study will for getting high marks as usual. So, this arrangement makes me more relax because i fill my time by useful tasks. Secondly, doing one task or one type of job creates sort of boring and sens of unproductivity feeling that lead to many problems. For example, a type of official job like the employee that sit a long time from 8 am until 3 pm and return back to his home for further sitting in front his television or surfing internet all this time will lead to many physical, social, and psychological problems. such as, hypertension, high blood sugar, obesity, social exclusion, social isolation. Moreover psychological problems for instance, depression and isolation. In conclusion, for all of these reasons i think my point of view is strong and solid enough to clarify the importance of doing many and different tasks on our life, health, and ages.
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in all their day long. And in my point of view
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between surfing internet to
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the maximum benefit in my studying, and talking with my friends to
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fill my
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by useful tasks.

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or one type of job creates sort of boring and sens of
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unproductivity
feeling that lead to
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problems.
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time
from 8 am until 3 pm and
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further
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time
will lead to
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physical, social, and psychological problems.
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my point of view is strong and solid
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to clarify the importance of
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on our life, health, and ages.
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23Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay Nowadays we live in very complex modern life. So, we have to do many and different task to fill our days in fruitful tasks. While, others prefer doing one task in all their day long. And in my point of view doing many tasks is very important to live more v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
302 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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