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TPO19 – Q1: Talk about a skill or ability you consider especially important for a student to have. v.1

TPO19 – Q1: Talk about a skill or ability you consider especially important for a student to have. v. 1
The traffic jam is one of the issues every metropolitan city is facing. This essay will discuss main contributing factors to this problem. This essay will also tackle some various ways to solve this. The increasing cases of traffic congestion can be accountable for two main reasons. One of the primary reasons is the lack of public transport during rush hour. If there are not enough buses, trams, or local trains available as an option, people are being forced to take their own cars as a result. Secondly, there have been an increasing number of cars on the road. As the number of people who are able to afford to purchase a car rises dramatically, thereby cars have begun to swallow the space on the streets. The aforementioned problems can be properly handled by several solutions. One imperative solution for this is the local authorities should invest more in adding public transport available in frequent time and reduce the price of tickets to make it more affordable. Moreover, people should be encouraged to use public transport or make a tax on private vehicles that can be used in developing public transport and improve road infrastructure. Take for example, in the Philippines, the Government imposes a law restricting the number of cars each household. In conclusion, it is irrefutable fact that traffic congestion is one of the biggest problems that every city is experiencing. The shortage of public transport and increasing number of cars are the two main reasons that is causing traffic jams. However, by investing of local authorities to add more public transport available and encouraging people to use it will eliminate the number of cars on the road.
The
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traffic
jam is one of the issues every metropolitan city is facing. This essay will discuss main contributing factors to this problem. This essay will
also
tackle
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some
various ways to solve this.

The increasing cases of
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traffic
congestion can be accountable for two main reasons. One of the primary reasons is the lack of
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public
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transport
during rush hour. If there are not
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enough
buses, trams, or local trains available as an option,
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people
are
being forced
to take their
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own
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cars
as a result
.
Secondly
, there have been an increasing
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number
of
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cars
on the road. As the
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number
of
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people
who are able to afford to
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purchase
a
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car
rises
dramatically
, thereby
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cars
have begun to swallow the space on the streets.

The aforementioned problems can be
properly
handled by several solutions. One imperative solution for this is the local authorities should invest more in adding
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public
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transport
available in frequent time and
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reduce
the price of tickets to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
make
it more affordable.
Moreover
,
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people
should
be encouraged
to
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use
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public
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transport
or
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make
a tax on private vehicles that can be
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used
in developing
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public
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transport
and
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improve
road infrastructure. Take
for example
, in the Philippines, the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
Government
imposes a law restricting the
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number
of
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cars
each household.

In conclusion
, it is irrefutable fact that
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traffic
congestion is one of the biggest problems that every city is experiencing. The shortage of
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public
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transport
and increasing
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number
of
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cars
are the two main reasons
that is
causing
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traffic
jams.
However
, by investing of local authorities to
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add
more
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public
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transport
available and encouraging
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people
to
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use
it will eliminate the
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number
of
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cars
on the road.
7Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7Mistakes
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IELTS essay TPO19 – Q1: Talk about a skill or ability you consider especially important for a student to have. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
280 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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