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The tables below gives information on consumer spending on different items in five different countries in 2002. v.1

The tables below gives information on consumer spending on different items in five different countries in 2002. v. 1
All counties of the world are experiencing warming of the earth with little or no solution proffer to this issue. This essay will discuss the reasons and offer solution at both government and individual level. Firstly, global warming is caused by deforestation. Since green herbs and trees absorb carbon dioxide (CO2) and expire Oxygen, falling down of trees will lead to more accumulation of CO2 in the atmosphere which will have a damaging consequence on the ozone layer and this will result in global warming. Moreover, in recent times there is the rapid industrialization of cities leading to generation of tonnes of CO2. It is now a common place to find airports, big generators, industrial plants in almost all cities and this will result in more CO2 production. The solution to this problem can both be tackled by the government and individuals. First, individuals should be responsible and aware of this problem. People should cut down in the number of vehicles they buy and use more public transport rather than their own ride. This will lead to significant reduction in CO2. In addition, households who are using generators /plants can replace it with solar energy. On the other hand, the government should pass bills and ensure the industries use alternate source of energy like bio-diesel rather than generator plant which will emit CO2. Furthermore, there should be strict punishment for the offenders that go against this law so that the public will be aware and will not trespass. In conclusion, global warming can be caused by various factors which include deforestation and industrialization. Collective effort by both individuals and governments can retard this issue.
All counties of the world are experiencing
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warming
of the earth with
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little
or no solution proffer to this issue. This essay will discuss the reasons and offer solution at both
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government
and
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individual
level.

Firstly
, global
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warming
is caused
by deforestation. Since green herbs and trees absorb carbon dioxide (CO2) and expire Oxygen, falling down of trees will lead to more accumulation of CO2 in the atmosphere which will have a damaging consequence on the ozone layer and this will result in global
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warming
.
Moreover
, in recent times there is the rapid industrialization of cities leading to generation of tonnes of CO2. It is
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now
a common place to find airports,
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big
generators, industrial plants in almost all cities and this will result in more CO2 production.

The solution to this problem can both
be tackled
by the
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government
and
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individuals
.
First
,
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individuals
should be responsible and aware of this problem.
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People
should
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cut
down in the number of vehicles they
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buy
and
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
use
more public transport
rather
than their
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
own
ride. This will lead to significant reduction in CO2.
In addition
, households who are using generators /plants can replace it with solar energy.
On the other hand
, the
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government
should pass bills and ensure the industries
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
use
alternate source of energy like bio-diesel
rather
than generator plant which will emit CO2.
Furthermore
, there should be strict punishment for the offenders that go against this law
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so
that the public will be aware and will not trespass.

In conclusion
, global
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warming
can
be caused
by various factors which include deforestation and industrialization. Collective effort by both
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
individuals
and
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
governments
can retard this issue.
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IELTS essay The tables below gives information on consumer spending on different items in five different countries in 2002. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
274 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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