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TPO18 – Q2: A/D? It is important to learn about other cultures. Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? It is important to learn about other cultures. Use details and examples to explain your opinion. v.1

TPO18 – Q2: A/D? It is important to learn about other cultures. It is important to learn about other cultures. Use details and examples to explain your opinion. v. 1
In some nations, more men and women are deciding to live by themselves these days as compared to recent years. I think this is a positive development because it can reduce stress as people can live freely without any restrictions and they can save their time. When people living alone their actions are not restricted to the housemates and this can reduce the stress. In other words, living with someone can create conflicts between them because of the different ideas and opinions about how a house should be maintained. Therefore, they do not need to accommodate others and that eventually results in reducing stress level. For example, a recent survey by the Guardian suggested that people who live alone are 20% less stress than the others who live with friends. Another reason to consider is that people can save a huge amount of their time by living alone. That is to say, when there are more members in house it can take more time to do household work. This means that it can help them to save time by not having to wait for others to finish using appliances or equipment that they need to use. For instance, a recent report by the New York Times revealed that families of four or more take an extra 20 minutes on average to get ready in the morning than a person who lives alone. In conclusion, the increasing trend of people living alone is beneficial as it can decrease the stress level because they do not have to share accommodation with others and it can save their precious time.
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their actions are not restricted to the housemates and this can
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reduce
the
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stress
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with someone can create conflicts between them
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different
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ideas
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should
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.
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, they do not need to accommodate others and that
eventually
results in reducing
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stress
level.
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, a recent survey by the Guardian suggested that
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people
who
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live
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alone
are 20% less
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stress
than the others who
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live
with friends.

Another reason to consider is that
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people
can
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save
a huge amount of their
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time
by
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living
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.
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to do household work. This means that it can
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by not having to wait for others to finish using appliances or equipment that they need to
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use
.
For instance
, a recent report by the New York
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Times
revealed that families of four or more take an extra 20 minutes on average to
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get
ready in the morning than a person who
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lives
alone.

In conclusion
, the increasing trend of
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people
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living
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alone
is beneficial as it can decrease the
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stress
level
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because
they do not
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their precious
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IELTS essay TPO18 – Q2: A/D? It is important to learn about other cultures. It is important to learn about other cultures. Use details and examples to explain your opinion. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
267 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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  • Meet the criteria
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