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Question 3: 60 secondsUniversity plans to expand its library in order to provide more shelves for printed materials and more desks for students. The man is against this plan. v.1

Question 3: 60 secondsUniversity plans to expand its library in order to provide more shelves for printed materials and more desks for students. The man is against this plan. v. 1
It is important to consider the type of home when searching for a place to stay. Although some people want to stay in a house, others feel that staying in an apartment has more benefits. In my essay, I will discuss why there are more pros than cons in living in a house compared with an apartment. One of the most significant advantages of a house over apartment is its large size. This is one benefit because household properties can easily be arranged without having anxiety over space. For example, a family consisting of five children can easily move into a three-bedroom house, and the kids will have more rooms for playing around. Comparing this with the latter, it will be difficult for the same size of the family to live in such condition and the children will not have a enough surrounding to play, because of lack of space. Another merit houses possess over apartments is the access to privacy. This is because you do not have to share the building with any other tenant. For instance, you will make full use of the kitchen, fridge, bathroom and dinning. Contrasting this with those who live in suites, which privacy is somewhat limited as they will have to share facilities with one another within the building. In conclusion, due to some problems of living in an apartment such as being too compact and lack of privacy, I believe that the benefit of staying in houses such as more freedom and private access to use facilities alone outweighs the drawbacks.
It is
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important
to consider the type of home when searching for a place to stay. Although
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some
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
want to stay in a
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
house
, others feel that staying in an
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
apartment
has more benefits. In my essay, I will discuss why there are more pros than cons in living in a
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
house
compared with an apartment.

One of the most significant advantages of a
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
house
over
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
apartment
is its large size. This is one benefit
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because
household properties can
easily
be arranged
without having anxiety over space.
For example
, a family consisting of five children can
easily
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move
into a three-bedroom
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house
, and the kids will have more rooms for playing around. Comparing this with the latter, it will be difficult for the same size of the family to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
live
in such condition and the children will not have
Use "an" instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
a
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enough
surrounding to play,
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because
of lack of space.

Another merit
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houses
possess over
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apartments
is the access to privacy. This is
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because
you do not
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have to
share the building with any other tenant.
For instance
, you will
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make
full
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
use
of the kitchen, fridge, bathroom and dinning. Contrasting this with those who
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
live
in suites, which privacy is somewhat limited as they will
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
have to
share facilities with one another within the building.

In conclusion
, due to
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
problems of living in an
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
apartment
such as being too compact and lack of privacy, I believe that the benefit of staying in
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
houses
such as more freedom and private access to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
use
facilities alone outweighs the drawbacks.
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7Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay Question 3: 60 secondsUniversity plans to expand its library in order to provide more shelves for printed materials and more desks for students. The man is against this plan. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
259 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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