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TPO12It is better to have broad knowledge of many academic subjects than to specialize in one specific subject. v.1

TPO12It is better to have broad knowledge of many academic subjects than to specialize in one specific subject. v. 1
Some of are the opinion that the design of a building should be influenced majorly by the projected use of the building instead of considering the aesthetic appearance. In my opinion, a building should be designed primarily on the basis of the nature of its future use. However, one must also consider its physical outlook as a contributing factor executing the design phase. On the one hand, to ensure a good life of a building, one must always consider its intended utilisation upon its completion. Constructing a building solely on the basis of its aesthetic appearance will leave it susceptible to poor performance during its utilisation. In other words, constructing a high rise tower to create a majestic outlook, when in reality, its projected use is suitable even for a low rise tower, would result in both wasted time and money. On the other hand, focusing the design of a building solely on how it will be utilised is not recommended. One must also consider the aesthetic appeal on its completion, which creates an appealing look to the nearby locality and the nation as such. It is the job of the designer to come up with a design that is both beautiful as well as utility-based. In conclusion, a building must be constructed by considering both the aspects, the projected utilisation as well as its outward appeal. It is up to the designer to strike a perfect balance between maximizing the overall efficiency of the building and creating a sound outward appearance.
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of are the opinion that the
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design
of a
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building
should
be influenced
majorly
by the projected
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use
of the
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building
instead
of considering the aesthetic appearance. In my opinion, a
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building
should
be designed
primarily
on the basis of the nature of its future
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use
.
However
, one
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must
also
consider its physical outlook as a contributing factor executing the
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design
phase.

On the one hand, to ensure a
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good
life of a
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building
, one
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must
always consider its intended
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utilisation
upon its completion. Constructing a
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building
solely
on the basis of its aesthetic appearance will
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leave
it susceptible to poor performance during its
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utilisation
.
In other words
, constructing a high rise tower to create a majestic outlook, when in reality, its projected
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use
is suitable even for a low rise tower, would result in both wasted time and money.

On the other hand
, focusing the
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design
of a
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building
solely
on how it will be
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utilised
is not recommended. One
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
must
also
consider the aesthetic appeal on its completion, which creates an appealing look to the nearby locality and the nation as such. It is the job of the designer to
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come
up with a
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design
that is
both
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beautiful
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as well as
utility-based.

In conclusion
, a
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
building
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
must
be constructed
by considering both the aspects, the projected
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utilisation
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as well as
its outward appeal. It is up to the designer to strike a perfect balance between maximizing the
overall
efficiency of the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
building
and creating a sound outward appearance.
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes
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IELTS essay TPO12It is better to have broad knowledge of many academic subjects than to specialize in one specific subject. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
252 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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