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TPO (S7-Q2): Learning through online courses is more effective than learning in traditional classroom setting. v.1

TPO (S7-Q2): Learning through online courses is more effective than learning in traditional classroom setting. v. 1
One of the most topical issues in modern society is animal testing. It is often said that animal testing is crucial and unethical, however, others believe that it should be banned. In this easy, I will discuss both sides of the contentious controversy. Generally speaking, there is a wide range of reasons why people believe that we must do tests on animals. Perhaps the main reason why people in favour of this trend is that it is the best way to research, analysis and observe effects of different medicine. For example, before promising drugs, vaccines or treatment is used on humans, it needs to be tested on animals in order to establish its safety. This practice has many a time-proven not only effective, but has saved lives. In addition, the animals which are used are not usually savage, but are bred especially for experimenting purpose. Therefore, it’s not true that animal tests are responsible for reducing the number of animal species. However, animal testing is necessary to protect human lives and reduce harm. Despite these arguments, there are more convincing arguments against this. The primary reason is that testing and experiment on animals are cruel and unkind, which cause a lot of pain, even death. For example, when we push injection on animal body, it will hurt them like we feel. In addition, there are many tests are not really important, and in fact, animals are not only used to test a new medicine but also cosmetics, which could be tested on humans instead. Finally, sometimes an experiment on animals gives us the wrong result because animals’ bodies are not exactly the same as our own. However, if we continue the experiment on animals, this will probably become terrible and questioned. In conclusion, it must be said that this has become a complex issue with no solution. Having both sides of the viewpoints I would argue that medical research, prevention of harms and eradication of diseases are valid to continue animal testing. However, inflecting cruelty on living creatures just for the sake of beauty like cosmetics research is not only unnecessary but also inexcusable.
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said that
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is crucial and unethical,
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believe that we
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. Perhaps the main reason why
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used
on humans, it needs to be
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tested
on
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animals
in order to establish its safety. This practice has
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a time-proven not
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effective,
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has saved
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lives
.
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used
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are responsible for reducing the number of
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species.
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is necessary to protect human
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and
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Despite these arguments, there are more convincing arguments against this. The primary reason is that
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testing
and experiment on
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animals
are cruel and unkind, which cause
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a lot of
pain, even death.
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, when we push injection on
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animal
body, it will hurt them like we feel.
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, there are
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tests
are not
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are not
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a new medicine
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animals’
bodies are not exactly the same as our
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own
.
However
, if we continue the experiment on
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, this will
probably
become terrible and questioned.

In conclusion
, it
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must
be said
that this has become a complex issue with no solution. Having both sides of the viewpoints I would argue that medical research, prevention of harms and eradication of diseases are valid to continue
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animal
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testing
.
However
, inflecting cruelty on living creatures
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just
for the sake of beauty like cosmetics research is not
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IELTS essay TPO (S7-Q2): Learning through online courses is more effective than learning in traditional classroom setting. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
354 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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