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In recent years, many small local shops have closed because customers travel to large shopping centers or malls to do their shopping. Is this a positive or negative development? v.2

In recent years, many small local shops have closed because customers travel to large shopping centers or malls to do their shopping. Is this a positive or negative development? v. 2
Traffic and pollution growth has been discussed for a long time, and one of the solutions presented is elevating the petrol price. But can it solve those problems for a long-term? This essay disagrees with the purpose commented before and shows other clean options like electronic cars to solve the pollution matters and how using bicycles could be good for traffic and health overall. To provide a better environment and breathing conditions in urban areas, electronic cars have been developing and improving to serve the population. The fact that they don't need gas to work makes them accessible to all social layers for its economy and efficiency. Besides, evaluations of European scientists have proved that the use of electronic cars prevents the emission of three tons of pollutants into the atmosphere. Another clean solution, but this time for traffic issues, is the use of bicycles. Many countries with a high level of population, like Japan, have adopted bicycles as transportation to avoid long hours in the traffic, that can lead them to stress. The companies which employees have experienced this new style of life notice the benefits in their good behaviour as a team and the downward in absence at work. To conclude, clean options like electronic cars and bicycles are alternatives to improve our way to commute in urban áreas, aiming better quality of life, instead of raising the petrol price. Better life consists in solving the traffic and pollution matters by helping the environment and delivering health to its residents.
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Traffic
and pollution growth has
been discussed
for a long time, and one of the solutions presented is elevating the petrol price.
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But
can it solve those problems for
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a long-term
? This essay disagrees with the purpose commented
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before
and
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shows
other clean options like
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electronic
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cars
to solve the pollution matters and how using
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bicycles
could be
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good
for
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traffic
and health
overall
.

To provide a better environment and breathing conditions in urban areas,
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electronic
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cars
have been developing and improving to serve the population. The fact that they don't need
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gas
to work
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makes
them accessible to all social layers for its economy and efficiency.
Besides
, evaluations of European scientists have proved that the
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use
of
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electronic
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cars
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prevents
the emission of three tons of pollutants into the atmosphere.

Another clean solution,
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but
this time for
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traffic
issues, is the
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use
of
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bicycles
.
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Many
countries with a high level of population, like Japan, have adopted
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bicycles
as transportation to avoid long hours in the
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traffic
, that can lead them to
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stress
. The
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companies
which employees have experienced this new style of life notice the benefits in their
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good
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behaviour
as a team and the downward in absence at work.

To conclude
, clean options like
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electronic
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cars
and
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bicycles
are alternatives to
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improve
our way to commute in urban
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áreas
, aiming better quality of life,
instead
of raising the petrol price. Better life consists in solving the
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traffic
and pollution matters by helping the environment and delivering health to its residents.
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7Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay In recent years, many small local shops have closed because customers travel to large shopping centers or malls to do their shopping. Is this a positive or negative development? v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
252 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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