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The best way to reduce pollution is to increase the price of fuel. Do you agree or disagree. What are other solutions can be to reduce pollution. v.1

The best way to reduce pollution is to increase the price of fuel. What are other solutions can be to reduce pollution. v. 1
The choice of whose instruction a child should follow has always been a cause of concern to people. Although it is believed by some that the young ones should emulate the examples of the older generations, others believe that challenging older people's ideas is logical. In my opinion, I think the situation on-ground will determine whether or not a child should challenge the instructions of the elders. On the one hand, some people think that the older ones are more experienced; as a result, will give more competent ideas. This is because the longer one lives on earth, the more knowledgeable he becomes, and this will put an adult in a position to give more sound advice to the growing generation because of the things he has seen and experienced while growing up. For example, when Miss Florence a teenager was about making a decision on the choice of car she wanted, she indulged her dad and he was able to give her a good response based on the fact that he had used a number of cars while growing up, and he could pinpoint a good one from a bad one. This goes to show that the young ones need to follow the elderly people's advice On the other hand, it is thought by some that the ideas of the older generation should be challenged because at times elders could give obsolete advice. In other words, because we live in a more advanced world, where things have evolved, it is possible that an adult's idea about a particular situation may be wrong or outdated, and instances like this, the child has the right to challenge such opinions. For instance, young Femi wanted to buy a new phone and requested the opinion of his grandfather. He was advised to buy a brand of phone. However, unknown to Femi, these brands were no longer available in the market. In my opinion, I think that the situation on the ground will determine whether a child should follow his elders. Instances that involve decisions related to technology or the latest trends in fashion, the elders might not have valid opinions about them; thus, misleading the young ones. However, advices relating to life experiences should be adhered to. To conclude, although it's important for younger ones to listen to elderly advice as they have accumulated enough experience about life over the years, it is also necessary that they challenge it too as the advice given may be out of date. However, in my opinion, children should pay attention to old peoples advice only on matters relating to life and not those on current trends.
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generations, others believe that challenging
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the situation on-ground will determine
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should challenge the instructions of the elders.

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was about making a decision on the choice of car she wanted, she indulged her
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need to follow the elderly
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in a more advanced world, where things have evolved, it is possible that an adult's
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a brand of phone.
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, these brands were no longer available in the market.

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that the situation on the ground will determine whether a
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should follow his elders. Instances that involve decisions related to technology or the latest trends in fashion, the elders might not have valid
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.
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relating to life experiences should
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, children should pay attention to
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IELTS essay The best way to reduce pollution is to increase the price of fuel. What are other solutions can be to reduce pollution. v. 1

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
440 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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