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do agree or disagree? learning through online courses is more effective than learning in the traditional classroom setting v.1

do agree or disagree? learning through online courses is more effective than learning in the traditional classroom setting v. 1
Nowadays, it is acknowledged that students from suburban regions and deprived families find it arduous to receive higher education. Thus, it is thought by many people that universities ought to provide necessary assistance to learners of rural areas. I completely agree with the given notion and believe that university's support play pivotal role students of poor financial background and rural areas. To begin with, it is certainly true that due to living conditions and economic issues many intelligent students become unable to study in universities. Therefore, if higher education institutes provide them some facilities such as scholarship or means of transportation such as a vehicle to commute from institute to their resident, it would become easier for these students to get enrolled in universities. Besides this, free or discounted course book can be rendered to disadvantaged students to aid them. For example, in India, students who come from poor families are provided with free books and stationary to motivate them to study, regardless of their financial conditions. Furthermore, universities can also offer opportunities for students to earn some wherewithal while studying. To be more specific, universities can offer several on-campus jobs to poor students so that they can be able to fund their educational expenses. Moreover, since some occupations demand university demand necessary qualification in relevant subject, it is becoming inevitable for students to pursue higher education in order to get a secure job. Hence, if students are unable to get admission in universities due to lack of monetary resource, they would not get suitable occupations, eventually it may have untoward repercussions on a nation's economy. Thus, universities should disburse its resources to help financially incapacitated learners. To conclude, it is clear that universities can help deprived students to a great extent by providing them financial aids, efficient transportation service, necessary academic resources and some means of earning. In my opinion, universities should strive to assist impoverished students by allocating certain funds so that they can get high paid jobs and add to the nation's economy.
Nowadays, it
is acknowledged
that
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students
from suburban regions and deprived families find it arduous to receive higher education.
Thus
, it is
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thought
by
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many
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people
that
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universities
ought to provide necessary assistance to learners of rural areas. I completely
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agree
with the
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given
notion and believe that university's support play pivotal role
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students
of poor financial background and rural areas.

To
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begin
with, it is
certainly
true that due to living conditions and economic issues
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many
intelligent
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students
become unable to study in
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universities
.
Therefore
, if higher education institutes provide them
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some
facilities such as scholarship or means of transportation such as a vehicle to commute from institute to their resident, it would become easier for these
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students
to
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get
enrolled in
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universities
.
Besides
this, free or discounted course book can
be rendered
to disadvantaged
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students
to aid them.
For example
, in India,
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students
who
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come
from poor families
are provided
with free books and stationary to motivate them to study, regardless of their financial conditions.

Furthermore
,
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universities
can
also
offer opportunities for
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students
to earn
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some
wherewithal while studying. To be more specific,
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universities
can offer several on-campus jobs to poor
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students
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so
that they can be able to fund their educational expenses.
Moreover
, since
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some
occupations demand
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university
demand necessary qualification in relevant subject, it is becoming inevitable for
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
students
to pursue higher education in order to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
get
a secure job.
Hence
, if
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students
are unable to
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get
admission in
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universities
due to lack of monetary resource, they would not
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get
suitable occupations,
eventually
it may have untoward repercussions on a nation's economy.
Thus
,
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universities
should disburse its resources to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
help
financially
incapacitated learners.

To conclude
, it is
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clear
that
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universities
can
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
help
deprived
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students
to a great extent by providing them financial aids, efficient transportation service, necessary academic resources and
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
means of earning. In my opinion,
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
universities
should strive to assist impoverished
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
students
by allocating certain funds
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
so
that they can
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
get
high paid jobs and
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
add
to the nation's economy.
7Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7Mistakes

IELTS essay do agree or disagree? learning through online courses is more effective than learning in the traditional classroom setting v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
336 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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