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Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? When classmates or colleagues communicate about a project in person instead of by e-mail, they will produce better work for the project. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer. v.405

When classmates or colleagues communicate about a project in person instead of by e-mail, they will produce better work for the project. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer. v. 405
Traffic congestion is one of the major emerging problems these days, which is causing lots of fatalities in road accidents. So, some people hold the opinion that a number of vehicles can be controlled to prevent such incidents. However, others believe that some other effective measures such as awareness of traffic safety, including speed limit and building wider roads cab be taken. I will discuss both views, I, however side up with later view. To begin with those who support the former view have thought that limiting the number of vehicles per family can reduce their total of roads and eventually roadway security can be enhanced. Moreover, there is no need to invest money on infrastructure such as building wider roads and multilane highways for reducing transportation. Therefore, such people consider it as the best and cost effective measure which can show immediate results. However, another go oppose because of many reasons, firstly by reducing vehicle number we cannot totally control road mishap. Because, traffic snarls are not the only cause of safety issues. It is due to the negligence of people and over speed of vehicles. Which is resulting from the breaching of traffic rules and ignorance. So, awareness should be provided to people to follow traffic rules and if they are found disobeying then strict action should be taken. Secondly, to control traffic congestion wider roads with multi lanes can be built and as an alternative metro ways or subways can be used. To conclude, no doubt roadway security can be improved be controlling automobiles on roads, but some other measures such as public awareness and transportation infrastructure along with are more important to curb the menace.
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Traffic
congestion is one of the major emerging problems these days, which is causing lots of fatalities in
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
road
accidents.
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So
,
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some
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people
hold the opinion that a number of
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vehicles
can
be controlled
to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
prevent
such incidents.
However
, others believe that
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
other effective measures such as awareness of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
traffic
safety, including speed limit and building wider
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
roads
cab
be taken
. I will discuss both views, I,
however
side up with later view.

To
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
begin
with those who support the former view have
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
thought
that limiting the number of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
vehicles
per family can
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
reduce
their total of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
roads
and
eventually
roadway security can
be enhanced
.
Moreover
, there is no need to invest money on infrastructure such as building wider
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
roads
and multilane highways for reducing transportation.
Therefore
, such
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
consider it as the best and cost effective measure which can
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
show
immediate results.

However
, another go oppose
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because
of
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
many
reasons,
firstly
by reducing
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vehicle
number we cannot
totally
control
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road
mishap.
“Because” at the beginning of a sentence usually requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
Because
,
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traffic
snarls are not the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
only
cause of safety issues. It is due to the negligence of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
and over speed of
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vehicles
. Which is resulting from the breaching of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
traffic
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
rules
and ignorance.
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
So
, awareness should
be provided
to
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people
to follow
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traffic
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
rules
and if they
are found
disobeying then strict action should
be taken
.
Secondly
, to control
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
traffic
congestion wider
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
roads
with multi lanes can
be built
and as an alternative metro ways or subways can be
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
used
.

To conclude
, no doubt roadway security can be
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
improved
be controlling automobiles on
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
roads
,
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
but
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
other measures such as public awareness and transportation infrastructure along with are more
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
important
to curb the menace.
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes
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IELTS essay When classmates or colleagues communicate about a project in person instead of by e-mail, they will produce better work for the project. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer. v. 405

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
279 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
  • ?
    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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