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tpo 49 Q2Some teachers think that it is important for students to sit in the same seats, that is, to sit in the same place every day in class. Other teachers think that students should be allowed to choose where they will sit, and they allow them to sit I v.1

tpo 49 Q2Some teachers think that it is important for students to sit in the same seats, that is, to sit in the same place every day in class. Other teachers think that students should be allowed to choose where they will sit, and they allow them to sit I v. 1
In this modern age, shopping has become a leisure activity. People tend to visit malls in their free time to spend time with family and friends. Consequently, this has resulted in more rush in shopping malls and low footfall at local small outlets in the retail area. I believe this to be a negative development, as this will result in unemployment and rise in price of goods. Nowadays, a lot of attractive malls have come up in the market with air conditioning, multiplex theatres, play zones, and fancy food courts. This has captured customers' attention and lured them towards spending more time in such centres. Moreover, shopping has become a preferred free time activity and people get the benefit of getting all the entertainment under on roof. To give a clear example, as per survey report published in times now states that 8 out of 10 people prefer to go huge malls for spending their weekend time. As there all needs are catered at one stop. Thus, this trend has attracted a lot of footfall. On the other hand, huge shopping centres have been the main for winding up of local small stores. Subsequently, many people have become unemployed. For example, Local store gives opportunity to people with less skills, who do not as presentable or posses talents like the salesperson in super outlets in malls. But unfortunately such outlets are shitting their businesses because of low footfall and low sales. Thus, resulting unemployment of less skill workers. Furthermore, firstly, a person is spending his hard earned money on shopping of goods that they do not really need, but, just buying it because its quite appealing. Secondly, they are consuming more of fast food which can be harmful for their health if over consumed. To illustrate, many families travel to shopping malls with their kids to do shopping of grocery items and also end up eating snacks in the food court to compensate their kids. This leads to spending on consumption of unhealthy meals by the entire family. In conclusion, the trend of huge malls has impacted the life of many individuals more in an inappropriate manner. It is leading to an unhealthy lifestyle and spending on unwanted goods. Additionally, it has also affected the local market and creating unfavourable circumstances for labours. Therefore, this in the long term will have an adverse effect on the society and the market.
In this modern age,
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shopping
has become a leisure activity.
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People
tend to visit
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malls
in their free
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time
to spend
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time
with family and friends.
Consequently
, this has resulted in more rush in
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shopping
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malls
and low footfall at
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local
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
small
outlets in the retail area. I believe this to be a
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
negative
development, as this will result in unemployment and rise in price of
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
goods
.

Nowadays,
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a lot of
attractive
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malls
have
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
come
up in the market with air conditioning, multiplex
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theatres
, play zones, and fancy food courts. This has captured customers' attention and lured them towards
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spending
more
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time
in such
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centres
.
Moreover
,
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shopping
has become a preferred free
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time
activity and
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people
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
get
the benefit of getting all the entertainment under on roof. To give a
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clear
example, as per survey report published in
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times
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now
states that 8 out of 10
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people
prefer to go huge
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malls
for
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spending
their weekend
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time
.
“As” at the beginning of a sentence usually requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
As
there all needs
are catered
at one
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
stop
.
Thus
, this trend has attracted
Possible agreement error. The noun footfall seems to be countable; consider using: "a lot of footfalls".
a lot of footfall
.

On the other hand
, huge
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shopping
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centres
have been the main for winding up of
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local
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
small
stores.
Subsequently
,
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many
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people
have become unemployed.
For example
,
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Local
store gives opportunity to
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people
with
Did you mean "fewer"? The noun skills is countable.
less
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skills
, who do not as presentable or posses talents like the salesperson in super outlets in
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malls
.
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But
unfortunately such outlets are
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shitting
their businesses
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because
of low footfall and low sales.
Thus
, resulting unemployment of less
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
skill
workers.

Furthermore
,
firstly
, a person is
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spending
his
This word is normally spelled with hyphen.
hard earned
money on
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shopping
of
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goods
that they do not
really
need,
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but
,
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just
buying it
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because
Did you mean "it's" (="it is") instead of 'its' (possessive pronoun)?
its
quite appealing.
Secondly
, they are consuming more of
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fast
food which can be harmful for their health if over consumed. To illustrate,
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many
families travel to
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shopping
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malls
with their kids to do
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shopping
of grocery items and
also
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end
up eating snacks in the food court to compensate their kids. This leads to
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spending
on consumption of unhealthy meals by the entire family.

In conclusion
, the trend of huge
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malls
has impacted the life of
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
many
individuals more
Consider replacing "in an inappropriate manner" with the adverb for "inappropriate"; e.g., "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
in an inappropriate manner
. It is leading to an unhealthy lifestyle and
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spending
on unwanted
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
goods
.
Additionally
, it has
also
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
affected
the
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local
market and creating
Possible spelling mistake. 'unfavourable' is British English.
unfavourable
circumstances for
Possible spelling mistake. 'labours' is British English.
labours
.
Therefore
, this in the long term will have an adverse effect on the society and the market.
7Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7Mistakes

IELTS essay tpo 49 Q2Some teachers think that it is important for students to sit in the same seats, that is, to sit in the same place every day in class. Other teachers think that students should be allowed to choose where they will sit, and they allow them to sit I v. 1

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
400 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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