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Asteroids are large space objects made of rock and ice There are hundreds of thousands of asteroids in our solar system Though we often hear ideas about establishing colonies of humans to live and work on our Moon or our neighboring planet Mars some think v.2

Asteroids are large space objects made of rock and ice There are hundreds of thousands of asteroids in our solar system Though we often hear ideas about establishing colonies of humans to live and work on our Moon or our neighboring planet Mars some think v. 2
The lecture challenges the specific arguments presented in the reading passage basically by these three following points. To work against the first argument that the low gravity asteroids maintains are often beneficial, the professor suggested that low gravity presents risks sometimes for causing people losing muscle weight and bones density. Especially in the case of long-term staying. And second, to disapprove the thought that profitable mining businesses, the whole picture should be considered as the cost of establishing a mining industry and setting up the transport are extremely high so that can come over than the profits this will make. On the other hand, if there is some other valuable metal resource found in Earth, the supplies increase, the price reduces. At last, for the argument that those asteroids are easy to reach. It is true in a way, but it also can be much harder to come back somehow. Those asteroids comes close to the Earth, and at some points, they move far away, even further than the distance of Mars. Thus, our people may reach easily but take a huge mount of efforts to come back home.
The lecture challenges the specific arguments presented in the reading passage
basically
by these three following points.

To work against the
first
argument that the low gravity asteroids maintains are
often
beneficial, the professor suggested that low gravity presents
risks
sometimes
for causing
people
losing muscle weight and bones density.
Especially
in the case of long-term staying.

And second, to disapprove the
thought
that profitable mining businesses, the whole picture should
be considered
as the cost of establishing a mining industry and setting up the transport are
extremely
high
so
that can
come
over
than the profits this will
make
.
On the other hand
, if there is
some
other valuable metal resource found in Earth, the supplies increase, the price
reduces
.

At last, for the argument that those asteroids are easy to reach. It is true in a way,
but
it
also
can be much harder to
come
back somehow. Those asteroids
comes
close to the Earth, and at
some
points, they
move
far away, even
further
than the distance of Mars.
Thus
, our
people
may reach
easily
but
take a huge mount of efforts to
come
back home.
6Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
0Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
2Mistakes

IELTS essay Asteroids are large space objects made of rock and ice There are hundreds of thousands of asteroids in our solar system Though we often hear ideas about establishing colonies of humans to live and work on our Moon or our neighboring planet Mars some think v. 2

Essay
  American English
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189 words
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