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TPO-43 - Independent Writing TaskImagine that you are in a classroom or a meeting. The teacher or the meeting leader says something incorrect In your opinion, which of the following is the best thing to do? -Interrupt and correct the mistake right away-Wai v.1

TPO-43 - Independent Writing TaskImagine that you are in a classroom or a meeting. The teacher or the meeting leader says something incorrect In your opinion, which of the following is the best thing to do? -Interrupt and correct the mistake right away-Wai v. 1
The issue of whether teachers should undertake the responsibility of teaching students to distinguish right from wrong has sparked off an intense debate among the public. Some people claim that teachers should give priority to impart students with academic and professional cognition and skills, while others argue that this action contributes to enabling students to become law-abiding and productive individuals who can make a contribution to the society. Personally, I agree with the latter opinion. To begin with, teachers play positive and essential roles in the realm of telling students right and wrong. It is simply because teachers are in a position to promptly and immediately point out and correct misbehaviour and mischief of students which are discovered and detected in the process of teaching and guiding. As a result, students can effectively establish and elevate their awareness of right and wrong by means of realizing and correcting their mistakes and weaknesses. Additionally, it is undeniable that a considerable number of parents are immersed in their work that they have a little amount of time to accompany and educate their children. Under such circumstance, teachers who are acknowledged as the most significant and indispensable people of educations of children, other than parents, should resume the responsibility and accountability of teaching children to differentiate right from wrong, which is conductive to preventing students from getting involved in any anti-social behaviours and helping them to erect correct and righteous code of conduct. Admittedly, teachers should fulfil academic function that imparts students with comprehensive and specialized knowledge and practical techniques, which can efficiently and largely improve their academic performances and lay a solid foundation of their career development. However, those well-educated individuals who lack the criterion of right and wrong would pose grave threats to the stability and security of the entire society as they are highly likely to make full use of their knowledge and skills to commit crimes. To conclude, I concede that the crucial and prior task and mission of teachers is to teach students a variety of transferable and useful skills and knowledge to explore and achieve the potentials of students. Nevertheless, I am still convinced that the public and the entire society can become the major beneficiaries from teachers attaching a heavier weight on telling students right and wrong.
The issue of whether
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teachers
should undertake the responsibility of teaching
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students
to distinguish
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right
from
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wrong
has sparked off an intense debate among the public.
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Some
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people
claim that
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teachers
should give priority to impart
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students
with academic and professional cognition and
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skills
, while others argue that this action contributes to enabling
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students
to become law-abiding and productive individuals who can
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make
a contribution to the society.
Personally
, I
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agree
with the latter opinion.

To
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begin
with,
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teachers
play
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positive
and essential roles in the realm of telling
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students
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right
and
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wrong
. It is
simply
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because
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teachers
are in a position to
promptly
and immediately point out and correct
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misbehaviour
and mischief of
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students
which
are discovered
and detected in the process of teaching and guiding.
As a result
,
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students
can
effectively
establish and elevate their awareness of
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right
and
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wrong
by means of realizing and correcting their mistakes and weaknesses.
Additionally
, it is undeniable that a considerable number of parents
are immersed
in their work that they have a
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little
amount of time to accompany and educate their children. Under such circumstance,
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teachers
who
are acknowledged
as the most significant and indispensable
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people
of educations of children, other than parents, should resume the responsibility and accountability of teaching children to differentiate
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right
from
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wrong
, which is conductive to preventing
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students
from getting involved in any anti-social
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behaviours
and helping them to erect correct and righteous code of conduct.

Admittedly
,
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teachers
should fulfil academic function that imparts
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students
with comprehensive and specialized knowledge and practical techniques, which can
efficiently
and
largely
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improve
their academic performances and lay a solid foundation of their career development.
However
, those well-educated individuals who lack the criterion of
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right
and
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wrong
would pose grave threats to the stability and security of the entire society as they are
highly
likely to
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make
full
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use
of their knowledge and
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skills
to commit crimes.

To conclude
, I concede that the crucial and prior task and mission of
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teachers
is to teach
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students
a variety of transferable and useful
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
skills
and knowledge to explore and achieve the potentials of
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students
.
Nevertheless
, I am
still
convinced that the public and the entire society can become the major beneficiaries from
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teachers
attaching a heavier weight on telling
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students
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right
and
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wrong
.
7Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7Mistakes
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IELTS essay TPO-43 - Independent Writing TaskImagine that you are in a classroom or a meeting. The teacher or the meeting leader says something incorrect In your opinion, which of the following is the best thing to do? -Interrupt and correct the mistake right away-Wai v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
381 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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