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Describe a picture/photo that you like. You should say: -what the picture/photo depicts-when the picture/photo dates from-how the picture makes you feel-and explain what makes this picture/photo so special to you. v.1

Describe a picture/photo that you like. You should say: -what the picture/photo depicts-when the picture/photo dates from-how the picture makes you feel-and explain what makes this picture/photo so special to you. v. 1
In this contemporary world, It is considered indispensable by many people that young generation ought to take advice from parents in different situations of their life, whereas others do not agree with this viewpoint. This essay will put forward both the arguments and provide and opinion. To begin with, it is important in today's world that children at an early age should ask for parents advice in order to prevent themselves from several adverse ramifications. In other words, teenagers often face an ample of challenges in their adolescence, and therefore they can easily get distracted. For this reason, they should always seek for the advice of their immediate elders. Because they have more experience of life and they will always provide wise as well as rational suggestions, which will not harm the life of children. In India, for example, many young people seek for a helpful advice from their parents when they are making some critical decision of their life as they feel that parents provide a sensible and wise opinion. Furthermore, children at their early age are not mature enough to take appropriate decision of their life, and hence parent's advice is of utmost importance. On the other hand, some people believe that children should not take advice from their parents as it will make them dependent, and they will not be able to develop the core skill of being decisive which is quite crucial for their future life. This is to say, young children has the ability to learn and master the learning in a quick and efficient manner, therefore, allowing them to make their own decisions will enable them to learn from their mistakes and eventually develop their decision making skills. For instance, in the United States, children take their own decisions starting from very early age, and thus successful and independent even at the age of 18. In conclusion, even though it is necessary for children to be deceptive about various decisions of life without any suggestions or advice from their parents, I strongly believe that they should always seek for the wise advice of their parents in the early age so as to prevent themselves from horrendous consequences. If juveniles start listening to their parents in their immature age, many child crimes will be avoided all over the world.
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is considered
indispensable by
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many
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people
that young generation ought to take
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advice
from
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parents
in
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different
situations of their
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life
, whereas others do not
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agree
with this viewpoint. This essay will put forward both the arguments and provide and opinion.

To
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begin
with, it is
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important
in
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today
's world that
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children
at an
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early
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age
should
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ask for
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parents
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advice
in order to
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prevent
themselves from several adverse ramifications.
In other words
,
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teenagers
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often
face
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an ample of
challenges in their adolescence, and
therefore
they can
easily
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get
distracted.
For this reason
, they should always seek for the
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advice
of their immediate elders.
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Because
they have more experience of
Use a comma before 'and' if it connects two independent clauses (unless they are closely connected and short).
life and
they will always provide wise
as well
as rational suggestions, which will not harm the
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life
of
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children
. In India,
for example
,
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many
young
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people
seek for a helpful
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advice
from their
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parents
when they are making
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some
critical
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decision
of their
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life
as they feel that
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parents
provide a sensible and wise opinion.
Furthermore
,
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children
at their
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early
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age
are not mature
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enough
to take appropriate
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decision
of their
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life
, and
hence
parent's
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advice
is of utmost importance.

On the other hand
,
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some
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people
believe that
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children
should not take
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advice
from their
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parents
as it will
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make
them dependent, and they will not be able to develop the core
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skill
of being decisive which is quite crucial for their future
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life
. This is to say, young
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children
has the ability to learn and master the learning in a quick and efficient manner,
therefore
, allowing them to
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make
their
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own
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decisions
will enable them to learn from their mistakes and
eventually
develop their
This word is normally spelled with hyphen.
decision making
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skills
.
For instance
, in the United States,
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children
take their
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own
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decisions
starting from
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very
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early
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age
, and
thus
successful and independent even at the
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age
of 18.

In conclusion
,
even though
it is necessary for
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children
to be deceptive about various
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decisions
of
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life
without any suggestions or
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advice
from their
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parents
, I
strongly
believe that they should always seek for the wise
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advice
of their
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parents
in the
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early
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age
'So as to' expresses purpose and is used in formal texts. Consider using "to"
so as to
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prevent
themselves from horrendous consequences. If juveniles
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start
listening to their
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parents
in their immature
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age
,
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many
child crimes will
be avoided
all over the world.
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7Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay Describe a picture/photo that you like. You should say: -what the picture/photo depicts-when the picture/photo dates from-how the picture makes you feel-and explain what makes this picture/photo so special to you. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
384 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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