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23. To find out about a course subject, would you prefer to go and ask a teacherabout it, or talk to a student who has already taken the subject? v.1

23. To find out about a course subject, would you prefer to go and ask a teacherabout it, or talk to a student who has already taken the subject? v. 1
Nowadays, with the advent of the computer and the widespread use of the internet, working at home become ubiquitous among workers around the world. This could bring both benefits and drawbacks for people’s development. On the one hand, employees who work at their accomodation would have more hours to complete the task, especially those whose house are quite far from their offices, they can distance themselves from unexpected factors such as traffic congestion which can cause them to be late. Because they spend more time on working painstakingly, their performances get better. Besides, due to working in the house, workers would have a private atmosphere and feel comfortable and free, thus they pay all their attention to duties. Furthermore, in modern society, almost staffs are lack of break to eat breakfast which is the most important meal of the day, so been working at home is a feasible solution to help employees enhance their health. For example, many big companies such as Google or Facebook, they incentivize their staffs to run programs at home for saving time, so the quality of the worker's life improved. Despite the advantages aforementioned, working at home also takes a heavy toll on employments and the company for some reasons. Firstly, many staffs becomes lazier because they have more hours at home and they often get up late. Secondly, they would miss desirable opportunities to learn experiences from their colleagues, boost their soft skills such as communication and teamwork, which is really important for the development of people. Thirdly, due to lacking of communication with people, they become unsociable and shying to contact with others and they gradually would be autistic. In conclusion, I believe that work-from-home jobs brings both advantages and disadvantages for employees as well as employers depending on each specific situation.
Nowadays, with the advent of the computer and the widespread
use
of the internet,
working
at home become ubiquitous among workers around the world. This could bring both benefits and drawbacks for
people
’s development.

On the one hand, employees who work at their
accomodation
would have more hours to complete the task,
especially
those whose
house
are quite far from their offices, they can distance themselves from unexpected factors such as traffic congestion which can cause them to be late.
Because
they spend more time on
working
painstakingly
, their performances
get
better.
Besides
, due to
working
in the
house
, workers would have a private atmosphere and feel comfortable and free,
thus
they pay all their attention to duties.
Furthermore
, in modern society, almost staffs are lack of break to eat breakfast which is the most
important
meal of the day,
so
been
working
at home is a feasible solution to
help
employees enhance their health.
For example
,
many
big
companies
such as Google or Facebook, they incentivize their staffs to run programs at home for saving time,
so
the quality of the worker's life
improved
.

Despite the advantages aforementioned,
working
at home
also
takes a heavy toll on employments and the
company
for
some
reasons.
Firstly
,
many
staffs becomes lazier
because
they have more hours at
home and
they
often
get
up late.
Secondly
, they would miss desirable opportunities to learn experiences from their colleagues, boost their soft
skills
such as communication and teamwork, which is
really
important
for the development of
people
.
Thirdly
, due to lacking of communication with
people
, they become unsociable and shying to contact with
others and
they
gradually
would be autistic.

In conclusion
, I believe that work-from-home jobs brings both advantages and disadvantages for employees
as well
as employers depending on each specific situation.
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IELTS essay 23. To find out about a course subject, would you prefer to go and ask a teacherabout it, or talk to a student who has already taken the subject? v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
299 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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Lexical Resource: 7.0
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
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