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TPO 43 Independent Writing TaskImagine that you are in a classroom or a meeting The teacher or the meeting leader says something incorrect In your opinion which of the following is the best thing to do Interrupt and correct the mistake right away Wai v.1

TPO 43 Independent Writing TaskImagine that you are in a classroom or a meeting The teacher or the meeting leader says something incorrect In your opinion which of the following is the best thing to do Interrupt and correct the mistake right away Wai v. 1
University studies are most important to every individual to achieve a job in good company. Most of the students live in their home and go to their universities to study while there are some others who study by staying far away from their place. Both have its own merits and demerits and I will reflect both my sides in the following passage. Firstly, getting educated by residing with families is a great opportunity for an individual. Because, one no need to stay away from their parents and also no need to adjust with different persons at the new place. Secondly, if an individual feel depressed and if there is any discomfort they can happily share with their parents. For example, if a student is not feeling well they can serve by their parents by having food and medicines as per timings. On the flip side, studying by staying at different place also has some advantages. Primarily, getting educated in a university at different place makes you live independently. At the same time, you can have a chance to mingle with different country's people, which helps you to gain knowledge in different aspects. Therefore, there are also some drawbacks like missing family and home food. Accordingly, if one habituated to stay away from families they can be experienced staying privately which helps them in their future. By staying away from home makes an individual to do their work by themselves. After having considered all the points that I have discussed above, we can finally draw a conclusion that both have their advantages and disadvantages. Further, choosing to study in a university totally depends upon one's mentality.
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to every
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to achieve a job in
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company
. Most of the students
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while there are
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others who
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study
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. Both have its
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merits and demerits and I will reflect both my sides in the following passage.

Firstly
, getting educated by residing with families is a great opportunity for an
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individual
.
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Because
, one no need to stay
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away
from their parents and
also
no need to adjust with
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different
persons at the new
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place
.
Secondly
, if an
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individual
feel depressed and if there is any discomfort they can
happily
share with their parents.
For example
, if a student is not feeling well they can serve by their parents by having food and medicines as per timings.

On the flip side, studying by
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at
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different
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place
also
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some
advantages.
Primarily
, getting educated in a
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university
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place
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makes
you
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live
independently
. At the same time, you can have a chance to mingle with
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different
country's
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people
, which
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helps
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different
aspects.
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, there are
also
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some
drawbacks like missing family and home food.
Accordingly
, if one habituated to stay
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away
from families they can
be experienced
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staying
privately
which
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helps
them in their future. By
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staying
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away
from home
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makes
an
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individual
to do their work by themselves.

After having considered all the points that I have discussed above, we can
finally
draw a conclusion that both have their advantages and disadvantages.
Further
, choosing to
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study
in a
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university
totally
depends upon one's mentality.
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IELTS essay TPO 43 Independent Writing TaskImagine that you are in a classroom or a meeting The teacher or the meeting leader says something incorrect In your opinion which of the following is the best thing to do Interrupt and correct the mistake right away Wai v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
275 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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