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TPO 42Workers are more satisfied when they have many different types of tasks to do during the workday than when they do similar tasks all day long. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer. v.2

TPO 42Workers are more satisfied when they have many different types of tasks to do during the workday than when they do similar tasks all day long. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer. v. 2
Without any shadow of doubt, occupation has an inextricable part of the life of everyone. Should people realize the importance of this element on prospering of human' s life, they will ponder to the influence of this fact much more scrupulously. Some people are inclined towards the performing diversity of tasks in the work place, while others believe that having different types of deeds in the work would make the situation more perplex. I do find the idea of the former group more in accordance with that of mine. To support my stance, in the course of this essay, I will substantiate my viewpoints. To begin with, since tendency to variety is closely tied to the nature of the human, majority of people penchant to have variety of tasks during the day. Although having different kind of activities in a day would need more energy, it could enhance the level of motivation in among the employees and inspire them to be more interested in their deeds. Moreover, it is crystal clear that only one type of tasks and similar ones should be so boring, decrease the worker' s motivation and diminish the efficiency of their performance. On top of that drawing line to the quality of jobs in a work place could have catastrophic effect on both economic of company and headway of the employees As an example, several years ago, when I was in internship in power plant of Tehran, every employee had only a bunch of limited responsibilities. Thus, in this situation, it was obviously witnessed that there was not favorable and boosting climate for prospering the workers. How would their boss expect high level of performance among his employees, without any provoking element? Another reason which deserves to say some words here is that having diversity in the work brings more experiences to the individuals. Obviously, hardly can anyone deny this fact that who has a more experiences in different kinds of vocation would be more successful in his or her career. Under this circumstance, people learn more and better than who has skill in one type field. To illustrate my point, I would like to mention some available statistic results. The results of a survey which is conducted recently in my country mention that multi-skilled and sophisticated people are more successful in their life, thereby, experience in different majors open doors to them and provide more opportunities in real life for example: a high salary jobs for them. In brief, by contemplating the aforementioned arguments, one soon realizes that existence diversity in the tasks of daily work has striking influence on not only flourishing employees but also boosting economic of society. Ergo, I strongly advocate this point that it is better to have different tasks in the daily career.
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life
of everyone. Should
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people
realize the importance of this element on prospering of
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life
, they will ponder to the influence of this fact much more
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.
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people
are inclined
towards the performing diversity of
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tasks
in the
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work
place, while others believe that having
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different
types of deeds in the
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work
would
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make
the situation more perplex. I do find the
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idea
of the former group more in accordance with that of mine. To support my stance, in the course of this essay, I will substantiate my viewpoints.

To
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begin
with, since tendency to variety is
closely
tied to the nature of the human, majority of
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people
penchant to have variety of
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tasks
during the day. Although having
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different
kind of activities in a day would need more energy, it could enhance the level of motivation in among the
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employees
and inspire them to be more interested in their deeds.
Moreover
, it is crystal
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clear
that
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only
one type of
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tasks
and similar ones should be
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so
boring, decrease the
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worker&
#039; s motivation and diminish the efficiency of their performance.
On top of that
drawing line to the quality of jobs in a
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work
place could have catastrophic effect on both economic of
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company
and headway of the
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employees
As an example, several years ago, when I was in internship in power plant of Tehran, every
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employee
had
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only
a bunch of limited responsibilities.
Thus
, in this situation, it was
obviously
witnessed that there was not favorable and boosting climate for prospering the workers. How would their boss
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expect
high level of performance among his
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employees
, without any provoking element?

Another reason which deserves to say
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some
words here is that having diversity in the
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work
brings more experiences to the individuals.
Obviously
, hardly can anyone deny this fact that who has a more experiences in
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different
kinds of vocation would be more successful in
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his or her
career. Under this circumstance,
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people
learn more and better than who has
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skill
in one type field. To illustrate my point, I would like to mention
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some
available statistic results. The results of a survey which
is conducted
recently in my country mention that multi-skilled and sophisticated
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people
are more successful in their
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life
, thereby, experience in
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different
majors open doors to them and provide more opportunities in real
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life
for example
: a high salary jobs for them.

In brief
, by contemplating the aforementioned arguments, one
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soon
realizes that existence diversity in the
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tasks
of daily
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work
has striking influence on not
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only
flourishing
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employees
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but
also
boosting economic of society. Ergo, I
strongly
advocate this point that it is better to have
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different
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tasks
in the daily career.
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29Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay TPO 42Workers are more satisfied when they have many different types of tasks to do during the workday than when they do similar tasks all day long. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer. v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
463 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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