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Essay topics: TPO 42. Workers are more satisfied when they have many different types of tasks to do during the workday than when they do similar tasks all day long. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer. v.1

Essay topics: TPO 42. Workers are more satisfied when they have many different types of tasks to do during the workday than when they do similar tasks all day long. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer. v. 1
It is undeniable that spending time on television these days has risen among children. While this approach cannot be replaced by a book in terms of learning, I would argue that it may lead to some benefits for them up to a point. To begin with, one of the most crucial negatives that watching television can lead is that lack of concentration on courses among children. The reason behind this is that they consume a lot of time sitting on television which might be resulted in laziness and losing their control while learning. For instance, scientists announced that dangers behind long periods of watching television can lead to fatal risks which usually lead to suffer from mental health issues. In other words, a child who watches a television for five hours on a daily basis will often lose their concentration in learning. Consequently, lower marks in learning achievement. However, the appropriate use of these devices may add to children’s knowledge. The reason behind this is that some learning programs on televisions might have tremendous benefits on a child. To illustrate, the vast majority of people believe that watching a learning program that includes cartoons and colourful backgrounds is usually beneficial for a child than the basic kind of learning. In contrast, if these children did not learn visually, they would not had achieved high marks. In conclusion, although sitting for longer periods of time watching television can lead to severe problems, I would say that right use of these advancements will lead to better attainments than the regular way of learning.
It is undeniable that spending time on
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television
these days has risen among
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children
. While this approach cannot
be replaced
by a book in terms of
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learning
, I would argue that it may
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lead
to
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some
benefits for them up to a point.

To
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begin
with, one of the most crucial negatives that watching
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television
can
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lead
is that lack of concentration on courses among
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children
. The reason behind this is that they consume
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a lot of
time sitting on
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television
which might
be resulted
in laziness and losing their control while
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learning
.
For instance
, scientists announced that
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dangers
behind long periods of watching
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television
can
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lead
to fatal
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risks
which
usually
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lead
to suffer from mental health issues.
In other words
, a child who
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watches
a
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television
for five hours on a daily basis will
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often
lose their concentration in
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learning
.
Consequently
, lower marks in
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learning
achievement.

However
, the appropriate
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use
of these devices may
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add
to
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children’s
knowledge. The reason behind this is that
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some
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learning
programs on
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televisions
might have tremendous benefits on a child. To illustrate, the vast majority of
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people
believe that watching a
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learning
program that includes cartoons and
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colourful
backgrounds is
usually
beneficial for a child than the basic kind of
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learning
.
In contrast
, if these
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children
did not learn
visually
, they would not
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had
achieved high marks.

In conclusion
, although sitting for longer periods of time watching
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television
can
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lead
to severe problems, I would say that right
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
use
of these advancements will
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
lead
to better attainments than the regular way of
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learning
.
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes
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IELTS essay Essay topics: TPO 42. Workers are more satisfied when they have many different types of tasks to do during the workday than when they do similar tasks all day long. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
261 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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