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TPO 38 - Question 2Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? It is more enjoyable for students to read works of fiction (such as novels and stories) than nonfiction. Use specific examples and details to support your opinion. v.1

TPO 38 - Question 2 It is more enjoyable for students to read works of fiction (such as novels and stories) than nonfiction. Use specific examples and details to support your opinion. v. 1
Animals are indeed used for research in a variety of seating, including tests to determine the safety of drugs, cosmetics, and other substances. Although reasons could be given to justify this action, in my opinion, these experiments should be banned because it is ethically unacceptable. On one hand, various reasons support the use of animals for trial testing. Most significant is that human is important, being on the planet. Therefore, the verification of new products at a human being is a risky process. Hence, scientists pick those animals whose anatomy are similar to mankind and to minimize the suffering they use numerous pain killers. For example, two years back a new drug of polio was tested in the countryside of Balochistan at several children results in the disability of some of them. Therefore, it is a precautionary measure to test it first at something else than humans. However, I would strongly agree with those who believe that animal experiments are immoral because research using animals doesn't justify the suffering they bear. If it is indispensable to run the tests then there are alternatives to animals that can serve the desired purpose. Nowadays, computerized human models are available that give identical results. In addition to this, Softwares are being introduced off the human immune system such as patient simulators. These tools generate accurate outcomes. Furthermore, with the advancements in biotechnology various techniques have been invented. The most common of them is in vitro testing in which analysis is carried out using human cells and tissues, instead of involving animals. In conclusion, although it is undoubtedly true that animal testing has helped scientists in drug developments and medical discoveries, I believe that the benefits to humans do not justify the pain of animals. So, researchers should use alternative methods to carry out research.
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Animals
are
indeed
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used
for research in a variety of seating, including
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tests
to determine the safety of drugs, cosmetics, and other substances. Although reasons could be
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given
to justify this action, in my opinion, these experiments should
be banned
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because
it is
ethically
unacceptable.

On one hand, various reasons support the
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use
of
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animals
for trial testing. Most significant is that
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human
is
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important
, being on the planet.
Therefore
, the verification of new products at a
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human
being is a risky process.
Hence
, scientists pick those
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
animals
whose anatomy
Consider using third-person verb forms for singular and mass nouns: "is".
are
similar to mankind and to minimize the suffering they
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
use
numerous pain killers.
For example
, two years back a new drug of polio was
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
tested
in the countryside of
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Balochistan
at several children results in the disability of
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some
of them.
Therefore
, it is a precautionary measure to
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test
it
first
at something
Use "(else)" to make a comparison with this adjective.
else
than humans.

However
, I would
strongly
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agree
with those who believe that
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animal
experiments are immoral
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because
research using
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animals
doesn't justify the suffering they bear. If it is indispensable to run the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
tests
then there are alternatives to
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
animals
that can serve the desired purpose. Nowadays, computerized
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
human
models are available that give identical results.
In addition
to this,
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Softwares
are
being introduced
off the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
human
immune system such as patient simulators. These tools generate accurate outcomes.

Furthermore
, with the advancements in biotechnology various techniques have
been invented
. The most common of them is in vitro testing in which analysis
is carried
out using
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
human
cells and tissues,
instead
of involving animals.

In conclusion
, although it is
undoubtedly
true that
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animal
testing has
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
helped
scientists in drug developments and medical discoveries, I believe that the benefits to
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
humans
do not justify the pain of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
animals
.
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
So
, researchers should
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
use
alternative methods to carry out research.
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes

IELTS essay TPO 38 - Question 2 It is more enjoyable for students to read works of fiction (such as novels and stories) than nonfiction. Use specific examples and details to support your opinion. v. 1

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
301 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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