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TPO 35 - Question 2Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? A university's academic reputation is the most important thing a student should consider in deciding which university to attend. Use examples and details to support your opin v.1

TPO 35 - Question 2 A university's academic reputation is the most important thing a student should consider in deciding which university to attend. Use examples and details to support your opin v. 1
It is a controversial issue as to whether governments ought to focus on buying faster public transport, or, whether they should spend revenue on other sectors such as living cost and environment. From my perspective, authorities must balance their spending in both sectors, because cost of living and environs are as important as public vehicles. To begin with, the speediness in transports for the public is essential, since citizens want comfort and convenience in reaching their destined places. This is because the public does not want to wait long hours to reach, such as offices, universities, and shops so that they want speed in cars, buses, motor vehicles, to name but a few. If transports take a long time to go any places, it hampers working activities of the public. For example, in Bangladesh, 95% of total conveyance are slow, which creates hassles in rush hours, consequently, officers get less salaries for being late at offices or most of the time students are absent in the first hour class. Therefore, authorities must allocate some money from taxpayers to invest in buying faster means of transports. On the other hand, governments must spend a good amount of money since citizens are also struggling with financing living expenses; besides the inhabitant of people are not eco-friendly. These two issues should be resolved by the bureaucrats of a country. To counter this menace, to illustrate, in the USA, the most significant step taken by the government is that it separates money, at least 49% of the total GDP, which helps the common people to spend less amount of money in living, whereas as the government provides funds in research teams who tend to reduce pollution dramatically on soil, air, and water, the public of this country is living healthier lives. In conclusion, although people think that only spending more on buying faster conveyance would solve the problem, other issues like the cost of living and the ambiance which has been polluted, should also be handled by authorities by investing revenue in it. In my opinion, investing funds in living and environs sectors should be similar to providing money on bringing faster cars at home.
It is a controversial issue
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as to whether
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governments
ought to focus on buying
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faster
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public
transport, or, whether they should spend revenue on other sectors such as
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living
cost and environment. From my perspective, authorities
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must
balance their spending in both sectors,
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because
cost of
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living
and environs are as
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important
as
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public
vehicles.

To
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begin
with, the speediness in transports for the
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public
is essential, since citizens want comfort and convenience in reaching their destined places. This is
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
because
the
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public
does not want to wait long hours to reach, such as offices, universities, and shops
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
so
that they want speed in cars, buses, motor vehicles, to name
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
but
a few. If transports take a long time to go any places, it hampers working activities of the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
public
.
For example
, in Bangladesh, 95% of total conveyance are slow, which creates hassles in rush hours,
consequently
, officers
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get
Did you mean "fewer"? The noun salaries is countable.
less
salaries for being late at offices or most of the time students are absent in the
first
hour
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class
.
Therefore
, authorities
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must
allocate
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some
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money
from taxpayers to invest in buying
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faster
means of transports.

On the other hand
,
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governments
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
must
spend a
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
good
amount of
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money
since citizens are
also
struggling with financing
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
living
expenses;
besides
the inhabitant of
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
are not eco-friendly. These two issues should
be resolved
by the bureaucrats of a country. To counter this menace, to illustrate, in the USA, the most significant step taken by the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
government
is that it separates
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
money
, at least 49% of the total GDP, which
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
helps
the common
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
to spend less amount of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
money
in
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
living
, whereas as the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
government
provides funds in research teams who tend to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
reduce
pollution
dramatically
on soil, air, and water, the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
public
of this country is
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
living
healthier
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
lives
.

In conclusion
, although
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people
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think
that
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
only
spending more on buying
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
faster
conveyance would solve the problem, other issues like the cost of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
living
and the ambiance which has
been polluted
, should
also
be handled
by authorities by investing revenue in it. In my opinion, investing funds in
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
living
and environs sectors should be similar to providing
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
money
on bringing
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
faster
cars at home.
7Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7Mistakes

IELTS essay TPO 35 - Question 2 A university's academic reputation is the most important thing a student should consider in deciding which university to attend. Use examples and details to support your opin v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
361 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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