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You should saywhat the book is aboutwhen you read ithow long you have been reading it forand explain what you like about the book v.1

You should saywhat the book is aboutwhen you read ithow long you have been reading it forand explain what you like about the book v. 1
A NUMBER OF PEOPLE FEEL THAT THE SPORTS AND PERFORMANCE INDUSTRY PAY ITS EMPLOYEES OUTRAGEOUSLY, I AM OF THE OPINION THAT IT IS RIGHTLY SO, FOR THE REASON THAT IT IS WELL DERSERVING FOR THEIR HEALING EFFECTS AND THE GENERATION OF REVENUES IT PROCURES. TO START WITH SOME JOBS SERVES GREATER PURPOSES BY THE WAY OF BRINGING A NUMBER OF PEOPLE FROM ALL OVER THE GLOBE TOGETHER FOR A COMMON GOAL, WHICH TAKES THE FORM OF SPORTING ACTIVITIES, MOVIES AND MUSIC SHOWS. SEVERAL TIMES ANNUALLY THERE ARE ENTERTAINMENT ACTIVITIES ORGANISED NATIONALLY THAT EVERYONE ANTICIPATES. IT IS INTERESTING TO NOTE THAT IT COMES IN FORM OF A COMPETITION THAT UNITES NATIONS IN THE SPIRIT OF SPORTSMANSHIP. IT CAN BE OBSERVED THAT SUCH ACTIVITIES PROVIDE IMMERSE PLEASURE AND HAPPINESS TO ALL AND SUNDRY LIKE NO OTHER OCCUPATION CAN. FOR THE REASON THAT IT INVOLVES PROFESSIONALS WHOM ARE MULTI TALENTED AND ARE KNOWN TO HAVE A GIFT WHICH SUPERSEDES EVERY OTHER PROFFESION, HOWEVER, MOST OF THE ENTERTAINERS HAVE GRASS TO GRACE STORIES WHICH IS A HUGE SOURCE OF INSPIRATION FOR MANY, ADVOCATING THAT TALENTS CAN TAKE ONE ANYWHERE IF ONE PERSEVERE. ON THE OTHER HAND, THERE ARE OTHER JOBS ESPECIALLY IN THE HEALTH SECTOR THAT SHOULD BE REGARDED SIMILARLY BECAUSE OF THEIR ABILITY TO RESTORE ONES HEALTH. ADMITTEDLY, THERE ARE ALOT OF MICRO ORGANISMS IN THE ATMOSPHERE WHICH HAS THE POTENTIAL TO CAUSE SICKNESS, THEREBY DISRUPTING A PERSONS LIVE AND SOMETIMES LEADING TO DEATH IF NOT PROPERLY MANAGED. IT CAN BE OBSERVED THAT DOCTORS AND NURSES PLAY A MAJOR ROLE IN THE SOCIETY FOR THEIR PROPENSITY TO HEAL THE SICK AND WOUNDED, ALLEVIATING THEIR SUFFERING AND ULTIMATELY RESTORING THEM TO THEIR MAXIMUM LEVEL OF WELLNESS. IN SOME CASES THIS PROFESSIONALS ARE NOT APPRECIATED FOR THEIR WORTH AND IT IS FROWNED UPON. IN AS MUCH AS SOME THINK THE ENTERTAINERS ARE OVER COMPENSATED FOR THEIR WORK, I STRONGLY BELIEVE THAT THEY ARE DESERVING OF SUCH, ALONGSIDE HOSPITAL PROFESSIONALS BECAUSE OF THEIR SKILLS WHICH MEASURES UP TO THEIR EARNINGS.
A NUMBER OF
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PEOPLE
FEEL THAT THE SPORTS AND PERFORMANCE INDUSTRY PAY ITS EMPLOYEES
OUTRAGEOUSLY
, I AM OF THE OPINION THAT IT IS
RIGHTLY
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SO
, FOR THE REASON THAT IT IS WELL
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DERSERVING
FOR THEIR HEALING EFFECTS AND THE GENERATION OF REVENUES IT PROCURES.

TO
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START
WITH
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SOME
JOBS SERVES GREATER PURPOSES BY THE WAY OF BRINGING A NUMBER OF
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
PEOPLE
FROM ALL OVER THE GLOBE TOGETHER FOR A COMMON GOAL, WHICH TAKES THE FORM OF SPORTING ACTIVITIES, MOVIES AND MUSIC
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
SHOWS
. SEVERAL TIMES
ANNUALLY
THERE ARE ENTERTAINMENT ACTIVITIES
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ORGANISED
NATIONALLY
THAT EVERYONE ANTICIPATES. IT IS INTERESTING TO NOTE THAT IT
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COMES
IN FORM OF A COMPETITION THAT UNITES NATIONS IN THE SPIRIT OF SPORTSMANSHIP. IT CAN
BE OBSERVED
THAT SUCH ACTIVITIES PROVIDE IMMERSE PLEASURE AND HAPPINESS TO ALL AND SUNDRY LIKE NO
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OTHER
OCCUPATION CAN. FOR THE REASON THAT IT INVOLVES PROFESSIONALS WHOM ARE MULTI TALENTED AND
ARE KNOWN
TO HAVE A GIFT WHICH SUPERSEDES EVERY
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OTHER
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PROFFESION
,
HOWEVER
, MOST OF THE ENTERTAINERS HAVE GRASS TO GRACE STORIES WHICH IS A HUGE SOURCE OF INSPIRATION FOR
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MANY
, ADVOCATING THAT TALENTS CAN TAKE ONE ANYWHERE IF ONE PERSEVERE.

ON THE
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OTHER
HAND, THERE ARE
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OTHER
JOBS
ESPECIALLY
IN THE HEALTH SECTOR THAT SHOULD
BE REGARDED
SIMILARLY
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BECAUSE
OF THEIR ABILITY TO RESTORE
Did you mean "one's"?
ONES
HEALTH.
ADMITTEDLY
, THERE
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ARE ALOT
OF MICRO ORGANISMS IN THE ATMOSPHERE WHICH HAS THE POTENTIAL TO CAUSE SICKNESS, THEREBY DISRUPTING A PERSONS
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LIVE
AND
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SOMETIMES
LEADING TO DEATH IF NOT
PROPERLY
MANAGED. IT CAN
BE OBSERVED
THAT DOCTORS AND NURSES PLAY A MAJOR ROLE IN THE SOCIETY FOR THEIR PROPENSITY TO HEAL THE SICK AND WOUNDED, ALLEVIATING THEIR SUFFERING AND
ULTIMATELY
RESTORING THEM TO THEIR MAXIMUM LEVEL OF WELLNESS. IN
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
SOME
CASES
Did you mean "these"?
THIS
PROFESSIONALS ARE NOT APPRECIATED FOR THEIR WORTH AND IT
IS FROWNED
UPON.

IN AS MUCH AS
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SOME
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THINK
THE ENTERTAINERS ARE OVER COMPENSATED FOR THEIR WORK, I
STRONGLY
BELIEVE THAT THEY
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ARE DESERVING
OF SUCH, ALONGSIDE HOSPITAL PROFESSIONALS
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
BECAUSE
OF THEIR
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
SKILLS
WHICH MEASURES UP TO THEIR EARNINGS.
7Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7Mistakes

IELTS essay You should saywhat the book is aboutwhen you read ithow long you have been reading it forand explain what you like about the book v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
334 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
  • ?
    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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  • Meet the criteria
  • Doesn't meet the criteria
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