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TPO 34 - Question 6Using points and examples from the lecture, explain two dry‐climate features of frogs. v.1

TPO 34 - Question 6Using points and examples from the lecture, explain two dry‐climate features of frogs. v. 1
In the modern world, many individuals are concerned about the demeanours of the sports people, because young generation can imitate their actions. In this reason, many people believe that athletes should not behave poorly. However, others feel that if they are playing well, they can allow such kinds of actions. There is no denying that sports people have a social responsibility in front of the sports viewers. In this regard, good manners are essential for sportsmen and sportswomen, if they are willing to be a rule model for youngsters, and set a good example. Otherwise, they can mislead young people. A good illustration of this is famous athletes, who is addicted to drugs or tobacco products. For example, a former boxing champion Mike Tyson is advertising his drugs through mass media, and his action can negatively affect young people. On the other hand, they can do whatever they want, if they are playing well, because it can be beneficial for the entertainment of sports viewers. It is widely known that many individuals are keen to watch sporting events in order to get relaxation. In this reason, if athletes do some wrong actions, it can increase the number of fans. Therefore, trash talking is popular among fighters, because it can entertain people, and attract people’s attention. To illustrate, mixed martial arts fighter Conor McGregor is popular, because of his trash talking. Due to his ability, many individuals are interested in MMA. To conclude, although many people believe that sportsmen and sportswomen can behave poorly, because they are entertaining fans, others feel that they cannot allow such kinds of actions, because they have a social responsibility in front of the sports viewers.
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individuals
are concerned
about the
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demeanours
of the
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sports
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people
,
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because
young generation can imitate their actions. In this reason,
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many
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people
believe that athletes should not behave
poorly
.
However
, others feel that if they are playing well, they can
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allow
such kinds of actions.

There is no denying that
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sports
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people
have a social responsibility in front of the
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sports
viewers. In this regard,
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good
manners are essential for sportsmen and sportswomen, if they are willing to be a
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rule
model for youngsters, and set a
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good
example.
Otherwise
, they can mislead young
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people
. A
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good
illustration of this is
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famous
athletes, who
is addicted
to drugs or tobacco products.
For example
, a former boxing champion Mike Tyson is advertising his drugs through mass media, and his
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action
can
negatively
affect young
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people
.

On the other hand
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because
it can be beneficial for the entertainment of
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sports
viewers. It is
widely
known that
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many
individuals are keen to
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watch
sporting
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events
in order to
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get
relaxation. In this reason, if athletes do
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some
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wrong
actions, it can increase the number of fans.
Therefore
, trash talking is popular among fighters,
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because
it can entertain
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people
, and attract
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people’s
attention. To illustrate, mixed martial arts fighter Conor McGregor is popular,
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because
of his trash talking. Due to his ability,
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many
individuals
are interested
in MMA.

To conclude
, although
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many
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people
believe that sportsmen and sportswomen can behave
poorly
,
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because
they are entertaining fans, others feel that they cannot
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allow
such kinds of actions,
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because
they have a social responsibility in front of the
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sports
viewers.
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IELTS essay TPO 34 - Question 6Using points and examples from the lecture, explain two dry‐climate features of frogs. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
280 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
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    Present relevant ideas
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  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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