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TPO 09Using points from the lecture, explain how the passion plant and the potato plant defend themselves from insects. v.1

TPO 09Using points from the lecture, explain how the passion plant and the potato plant defend themselves from insects. v. 1
Nowadays, it is clearly seen that many criminal judgements are published on social media, especially on TV, which catch huge attention from the people. From my perspective, the benefits of this trend override the drawbacks. On the one hand, the court process showing on tv may cause some drawbacks for the government as well as the prisoners. It is true that the criminals have to take the responsibility for the crimes, but many people argue that the governments have no right to take people’s life, even though they committed a felony. In further conflict, there will be a gap between the governments and the residents, thus the government will soon gain no supports. What is more, the prisoners are likely to be given a bad image, whether their criminal commitments are not so serious, this will cause them hardly to adapt back to the community. Although the negativeness is considerable, the positiveness is likely to override by some remarkable reasons. Admittedly, by judging the criminals on social media, the government can show off the political power to the citizens, the people will be afraid of carrying out a crime so that the crime rate would be reduced. This positive change will lead people to a peaceful life. More importantly, in many countries, the justice is likely to be broken by the interruption of money, the some unfair judgements are given. As the pedestrians can follow the criminal trial on tv, every punishment will be based on laws and no more cheating, this may help the governments gain more trust from the people as well as supporting totality. In conclusion, despite there will be some disagreements from the people, this trend still benefit both the society and the government, which will help the country to accelerate the development of the country.
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clearly
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seen
that
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many
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criminal
judgements
are published
on social media,
especially
on TV, which catch huge attention from the
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people
. From my perspective, the benefits of this trend override the drawbacks.

On the one hand, the court process showing on
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tv
may cause
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some
drawbacks for the
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government
as well
as the prisoners. It is true that the
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criminals
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have to
take the responsibility for the crimes,
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but
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many
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people
argue that the
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governments
have no right to take
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people’s
life,
even though
they committed a felony. In
further
conflict, there will be a gap between the
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governments
and the residents,
thus
the
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government
will
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soon
gain no supports.
What is more
, the prisoners are likely to be
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given
a
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bad
image, whether their
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criminal
commitments are not
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so
serious, this will cause them hardly to adapt back to the community.

Although the negativeness is considerable, the positiveness is likely to override by
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some
remarkable reasons.
Admittedly
, by judging the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
criminals
on social media, the
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government
can
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show
off the political power to the citizens, the
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people
will be afraid of carrying out a crime
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so
that the crime rate would be
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reduced
. This
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positive
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change
will lead
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people
to a peaceful life. More
importantly
, in
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many
countries, the justice is likely to
be broken
by the interruption of money, the
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some
unfair judgements are
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given
. As the pedestrians can follow the
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criminal
trial on
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tv
, every punishment will
be based
on laws and no more cheating, this may
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help
the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
governments
gain more trust from the
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people
as well
as supporting totality.

In conclusion
, despite there will be
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some
disagreements from the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
, this trend
still
benefit both the society and the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
government
, which will
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
help
the country to accelerate the development of the country.
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IELTS essay TPO 09Using points from the lecture, explain how the passion plant and the potato plant defend themselves from insects. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
300 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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