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In recent years, many frog species around the world have declined in numbers or even gone extinct due to changes in their environment. These population declines and extinctions have serious consequences for the ecosystems in which frogs live; for example, v.1

In recent years, many frog species around the world have declined in numbers or even gone extinct due to changes in their environment. These population declines and extinctions have serious consequences for the ecosystems in which frogs live; for example, v. 1
It is undoubtedly the case that the world today has become a global village. One of the effects of this is that increasingly people in all corners of the world are exposed to similar services and products and adopt similar habits. My view is that this is largely a beneficial process and in this essay I will explain why. The first point to make is that there are some downsides to this process of cultural globalisation, but these are relatively minor. The most significant of these disadvantages is that it can weaken national culture and traditions. For example, if people watch films and television programmes produced in the United States, sometimes they adopt aspects of the lifestyle of the American characters they see on television. Typically, however, this only affects minor details such as clothing and does not seriously threaten national identity. When we turn to the other side of the argument, there are two major points to make in favour of this process. The first of these is that the more we share habits, products and services, the better we understand each other and this reduces prejudice against other nations. The other point relates to modernity. It is a sign of progress in a society that people no longer are restricted to brands and advertisements from their own society but are able to access more international goods. If, for example, there were unable to drink Coca Cola or wear Nike, then that would mean their society was not part of the international community. In conclusion, I understand the point of view of people who worry about cultural globalisation because it is a threat to national traditions. However, this is outweighed by its positive impact on international understanding and the fact that it represents progress within a society.
It is
undoubtedly
the case that the world
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today
has become a global village. One of the effects of this is that
increasingly
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people
in all corners of the world
are exposed
to similar services and products and adopt similar habits. My view is that this is
largely
a beneficial process and in this essay I will
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explain
why.

The
first
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point
to
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make
is that there are
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some
downsides to this process of cultural
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globalisation
,
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but
these are
relatively
minor. The most significant of these disadvantages is that it can weaken national culture and traditions.
For example
, if
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people
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watch
films and television
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programmes
produced in the United States,
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sometimes
they adopt aspects of the lifestyle of the American characters they
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see
on television.
Typically
,
however
, this
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only
affects minor
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details
such as clothing and does not
seriously
threaten national identity.

When we turn to the
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other
side of the argument, there are two major
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points
to
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make
in
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favour
of this process. The
first
of these is that the more we share habits, products and services, the better we understand each
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other
and this
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reduces
prejudice against
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other
nations. The
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other
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point
relates to modernity. It is a
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sign
of progress in a
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society
that
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people
no longer
are restricted
to brands and advertisements from their
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own
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society
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but
are able to access more international
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goods
. If,
for example
, there were unable to drink Coca Cola or wear Nike, then that would mean their
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society
was not part of the international community.

In conclusion
, I understand the
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point
of view of
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people
who worry about cultural
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globalisation
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because
it is a threat to national traditions.
However
, this
is outweighed
by its
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positive
impact on international understanding and the fact that it represents progress within a
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society
.
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes

IELTS essay In recent years, many frog species around the world have declined in numbers or even gone extinct due to changes in their environment. These population declines and extinctions have serious consequences for the ecosystems in which frogs live; for example, v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
298 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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