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TPO 07 - Question 1If friends from another country were going to spend time in your country, what city or place would you suggest they visit? Using details and examples, explain why. v.1

TPO 07 - Question 1If friends from another country were going to spend time in your country, what city or place would you suggest they visit? Using details and examples, explain why. v. 1
Nowadays, it is common for people to study abroad as a part of their study, and the reason behind the increase in University students studying abroad, because of their curiosity to travel far-off place as well as to improve their Adaptivity over the other environments these are some of the advantages of studying abroad. From my point of view, even though, studying abroad has its own disadvantages like others, but these disadvantages will become balanced when compared with the advantages received. Therefore, these Positivity and negativity will be discussed in the upcoming paragraph. To begin, there are several reasons which point out the benefits obtained from studying abroad. For instance, when a person travel to far-off places, he may have fear, home sickness etc. But once he gets adapted to these situations. That individual will automatically gain confidence to handle the problems that the human has to face. In addition to this, the person's has the opportunity to learn about other countries culture, habits etc. Despite these positivity the major benefit that a human will obtain from education abroad is the knowledge. Secondly, the disadvantage is minimized when compared with advantage. Therefore, some of the Known disadvantages are fearful, homesickness, stress, depression etc. However, once an individual Persists all these disadvantages, he will receive a Boon called Adaptivity. Thus, There is an old saying which says an individual need to lose something in order to gain something, which is proven in the above paragraph. In conclusion, the fact that more and more students opt to study abroad is a clear indication that the advantages of this development outweigh the disadvantages. Moreover, there are some minor drawbacks in pursuing higher education abroad, but a student who is willing to adapt to the cultural and climatic change can reap rich benefits from studying overseas.
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as a part of their study, and the reason behind the increase in University students
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studying
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,
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because
of their curiosity to travel far-off place
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over the other environments these are
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studying
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. From my point of view,
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studying
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has its
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disadvantages like others,
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but
these disadvantages will become balanced when compared with the
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advantages
received.
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,
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these Positivity
and negativity will
be discussed
in the upcoming paragraph.

To
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, there are several reasons which point out the benefits obtained from
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studying
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.
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, when a person travel to far-off places, he may have fear, home sickness etc.
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once he
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adapted to these situations. That individual will
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In addition
to this, the person's has the opportunity to learn about other countries culture, habits etc. Despite
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the major benefit that a human will obtain from education
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is the knowledge.

Secondly
, the
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is minimized
when compared with
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.
Therefore
,
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Known disadvantages are fearful, homesickness,
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, depression etc.
However
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Adaptivity
.
Thus
, There is an
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saying which says an individual need to lose something in order to gain something, which
is proven
in the above paragraph.

In conclusion
, the fact that more and more students opt to study
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abroad
is a
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clear
indication that the
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advantages
of this development outweigh the disadvantages.
Moreover
, there are
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some
minor drawbacks in pursuing higher education
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abroad
,
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but
a student who is willing to adapt to the cultural and climatic
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can reap rich benefits from
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studying
overseas.
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7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay TPO 07 - Question 1If friends from another country were going to spend time in your country, what city or place would you suggest they visit? Using details and examples, explain why. v. 1

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
302 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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