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TPO 30. Q1. A friend of yours is looking for a new place to live and has asked for your advice. What do you think is the most important characteristic of a good neighborhood? Use details and examples to explain your answer v.1

TPO 30. Q1. A friend of yours is looking for a new place to live and has asked for your advice. What do you think is the most important characteristic of a good neighborhood? v. 1
In the recent years, most people, particularly in developed countries, likely to opt for living independently. Although living solo come along with several drawbacks, I would consider this more of a positive development. For several reasons, living alone may have some drawbacks. Firstly, living independently can be extremely costly as life is becoming increasingly complex and property price is just skyrocketing. This has created a difficult situation in finding an accommodation at a reasonable price. For this reason, single occupants may have to work unbelievably hard to make their ends meet. Being a singleton has meant that they cannot expect any financial or moral support from family or relatives in most cases. Lone occupants are more likely to experience depression, anxiety and uncertainty with bearing all household responsibilities on top of pursuing a work life than family-oriented people. As a result, single people tend to lead a hectic as well as burdensome life with having a feeling of being resented and anguished and therefore resulting an unhealthy lifestyle. On the other hand, I believe that people, leading a life as single dwellers are the luckiest one. A sense of freedom with an acute privacy is something considered as the most desirable element of a happy life. This is the main reason why single occupant tends to be seen as a successful peer of the society. Because living a life on their own allows them to invest a precious time in the development growth and shaping out their personality. Furthermore, single people are likely to attend more public social affairs, thus allowing cities and urban areas to reinvigorate as they spend more money on holiday-making, doing outdoor activities or surfing other services compared to their couple counterparts. Finally, if more people became independent, the more they live greener by living in apartments or near to towns instead of living in suburb houses and commuting to work from far away stretched distances. To sum up, going solo may have some disadvantages but I would argue that this development should be seen as a progress.
In the recent years, most
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people
,
particularly
in
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developed countries
, likely to opt for
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living
independently
. Although
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living
solo
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come
along with several drawbacks, I would consider this more of a
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positive
development.

For several reasons,
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living
alone may have
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some
drawbacks.
Firstly
,
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living
independently
can be
extremely
costly as
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life
is becoming
increasingly
complex and property price is
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just
skyrocketing. This has created a difficult situation in finding
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an accommodation
at a reasonable price.
For this reason
,
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single
occupants may
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have to
work
unbelievably
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hard
to
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make
their ends
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meet
. Being a singleton has meant that they cannot
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expect
any financial or moral support from family or relatives
in most cases
. Lone occupants are more likely to experience depression, anxiety and uncertainty with bearing all household responsibilities on top of pursuing a work
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life
than family-oriented
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people
.
As a result
,
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single
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people
tend to lead a hectic
as well
as burdensome
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life
with having a feeling of
being resented
and anguished and
therefore
resulting an unhealthy lifestyle.

On the other hand
, I believe that
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people
, leading a
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life
as
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single
dwellers are the luckiest one. A sense of freedom with an acute privacy is something considered as the most desirable element of a happy
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life
. This is the main reason why
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single
occupant tends to be
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seen
as a successful peer of the society.
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Because
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living
a
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life
on their
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own
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allows
them to invest a precious time in the development growth and shaping out their personality.
Furthermore
,
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single
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people
are likely to attend more public social affairs,
thus
allowing cities and urban areas to reinvigorate as they spend more money on holiday-making, doing outdoor activities or surfing other services compared to their couple counterparts.
Finally
, if more
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people
became independent, the more they
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live
greener by
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living
in apartments or near to towns
instead
of
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living
in suburb
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houses
and commuting to work from far away stretched distances.

To sum up, going solo may have
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some
disadvantages
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but
I would argue that this development should be
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seen
as
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a progress
.
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IELTS essay TPO 30. Q1. A friend of yours is looking for a new place to live and has asked for your advice. What do you think is the most important characteristic of a good neighborhood? v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
342 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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