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TOEFL essay: A friend of yours has received some money and plans to use all of it either to go a vacation or buy a car, you friend has asked you for advice. Compare your friend’s two choices and explain which one you think your friend should choose. Use. v.1

TOEFL essay: A friend of yours has received some money and plans to use all of it either to go a vacation or buy a car, you friend has asked you for advice. Compare your friend’s two choices and explain which one you think your friend should choose. Use. v. 1
Education is the key to climb up the ladder of life. Some part of the population believes that academic success is dependent upon the good teachers. Rest think that attitude of the student is what determines the success. In my opinion, the presence of right tutor is important to show the correct path to a learner. Having a good mentor in life is crucial as he/she can point the pupil in the true direction. Good teachers will help to rectify mistakes a learner commits and also provide advices to prevent future mistakes. For instance, an English professor in a university won't only correct the wrong grammar, but also identify the wrong usage of the language students may use in future. They will, henceforth, can give the proper practice sessions to the scholar. Student attitude is equally imperative in achieving educational success, as without the will of him, there is nothing a tutor can do to make him understand the concepts. If a learner has the positive outlook towards education, only then he can achieve a plethora of achievements. After all, "If there is a will, there is a way". In conclusion, it is vital to have both correct attitude as it keeps student motivated towards studies as well as a good teacher as he/she can help one in bringing back a learn to accurate path. Furthermore, I find it more important to have a proper guide in student life as it is really difficult to correct oneself on its own and identify self mistakes
Education is the key to climb up the ladder of life.
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part of the population believes that academic success is dependent upon the
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good
teachers. Rest
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think
that attitude of the
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student
is what determines the success. In my opinion, the presence of right tutor is
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important
to
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show
the
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correct
path to a learner.

Having a
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good
mentor in life is crucial as he/she can point the pupil in the true direction.
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Good
teachers will
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help
to rectify mistakes a learner commits and
also
provide advices to
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prevent
future mistakes.
For instance
, an English professor in a university won't
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only
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correct
the
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wrong
grammar,
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but
also
identify the
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usage of the language
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students
may
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use
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in future
. They will, henceforth, can give the proper practice sessions to the scholar.

Student attitude is
equally
imperative in achieving educational success, as without the will of him, there is nothing a tutor can do to
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make
him understand the concepts. If a learner has the
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positive
outlook towards education,
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only
then he can achieve a plethora of achievements.
After all
,
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If there is a will, there is a way
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In conclusion
, it is vital to have both
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correct
attitude as it
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keeps
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student
motivated towards studies
as well
as a
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good
teacher as he/she can
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help
one in bringing back
After 'a', do not use a verb. Make sure that the spelling of 'learn' is correct. If 'learn' is the first word in a compound adjective, use a hyphen between the two words. Note: This error message can occur if you use a verb as a noun, and the word is not a noun in standard English.
a learn
to accurate path.
Furthermore
, I find it more
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important
to have a proper guide in
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student
life as it is
really
difficult to
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correct
oneself on its
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own
and identify self mistakes
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay TOEFL essay: A friend of yours has received some money and plans to use all of it either to go a vacation or buy a car, you friend has asked you for advice. Compare your friend’s two choices and explain which one you think your friend should choose. Use. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
253 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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