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TPO 3 _ Independent TaskDo you agree or disagree with the following statement? It is more important to keep your old friends than it is to make new friends. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer. v.2

TPO 3 _ Independent Task It is more important to keep your old friends than it is to make new friends. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer. v. 2
Some people claim that making new friends is better that keeping your friends for a long time. But I am of the opinion that an old friendship plays a significant role in everyone’s life. Should people realize the importance of such friendships in a person’s fate, they will ponder over it much more scrupulously. In the following paragraphs I will delve into the most important reasons to illustrate my viewpoint. To begin with, it is axiomatic that old friends know each other very well. In other words, you do not need to spend time to know your old friend. But when you make new ones, sometimes it results in some misunderstandings. To illustrate the idea let’s consider the following experience of my own life. I remember once I was really exhausted because of my job, and I had a meeting with my friend who I had met recently. And because she did not know my job’s condition, she thought that I was not paying attention to her so she was upset for that night for a long time. Thus, nobody could overlook the fact that on numerous occasions having old friends leads to a better understanding. The second rationale why I advocate this point of view, lies in the fact that old friends support each other emotionally and financially whenever their friend needs them. That is to say when you have friends from your childhood, they will care about you much more than a person who knows you for a month. For example last year I had a very bad car accident in which my car was damaged so badly. I did not want my family to find out. So I borrowed money from my old buddy and I repaired my car as soon as possible. Therefore, on no account can underrate the efficacy of old friends with regards to emotional and financial support you might need in your life. The last but not the least reason supporting my perspective would be the indisputable fact that old friends make our life enjoyable. It cannot be denied that when you have someone who has a lot of same interests, you enjoy spending time with them. The noteworthy intelligible statistics, revealed by a recent social research conducted in my country, show that having a lot of old friends would result in a longer and happier life. This statistics mention us that old friends help us to enjoy our days of our lives. By taking all above-mentioned arguments into consideration, the following conclusion can be drawn about the issue. I strongly believe that having old friends is much better than making new ones. This is because there is no need to try to know them, they would support you whenever you need and life is much more joyful with them.
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claim that making new
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is better that keeping your
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friends
for a long
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time
.
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I am of the opinion that an
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old
friendship plays a significant role in everyone’s
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life
. Should
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people
realize the importance of such friendships in a person’s fate, they will ponder over it
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much
more
scrupulously
. In the following paragraphs I will delve into the most
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important
reasons to illustrate my viewpoint.

To
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begin
with, it is axiomatic that
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old
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friends
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know
each other
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very
well.
In other words
, you do not
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need
to spend
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time
to
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know
your
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old
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friend
.
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when you
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new
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,
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sometimes
it results in
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some
misunderstandings. To illustrate the
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idea
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let
’s consider the following experience of my
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own
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life
. I remember once I was
really
exhausted
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because
of my job, and I had a meeting with my
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friend
who I had met recently. And
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because
she did not
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know
my job’s condition, she
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thought
that I was not paying attention to her
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so
she
was upset
for that night for a long
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time
.
Thus
, nobody could overlook the fact that on numerous occasions having
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old
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friends
leads to a better understanding.

The second rationale why I advocate this point of view, lies in the fact that
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old
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friends
support each other
emotionally
and
financially
whenever their
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friend
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needs
them.
That is
to say when you have
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friends
from your childhood, they will care about you
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much
more than a person who
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knows
you for a month.
For example
last year I had a
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very
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bad
car accident in which my car
was damaged
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so
badly
. I did not want my family to find out.
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So
I borrowed money from my
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old
buddy and I repaired my car as
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soon
as possible.
Therefore
, on no account can underrate the efficacy of
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old
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friends
Use "in regard to", "with regard to", or more simply "regarding".
with regards to
emotional and financial support you might
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need
in your life.

The last
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not the least reason supporting my perspective would be the indisputable fact that
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old
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friends
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make
our
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life
enjoyable. It cannot
be denied
that when you have someone who has
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a lot of
same interests, you enjoy spending
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time
with them. The noteworthy intelligible statistics, revealed by
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a recent social research
conducted in my country,
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show
that having
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a lot of
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old
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would result in a longer and happier
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life
.
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This statistics mention
us that
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old
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friends
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help
us to enjoy our days of our
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lives
.

By taking all above-mentioned arguments into consideration, the following conclusion can
be drawn
about the issue. I
strongly
believe that having
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old
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friends
is
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much
better than making new
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ones
. This is
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because
there is no
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need
to try to
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know
them, they would support you whenever you
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need
and
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life
is
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much
more joyful with them.
11Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
50Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
4Mistakes

IELTS essay TPO 3 _ Independent Task It is more important to keep your old friends than it is to make new friends. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer. v. 2

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
467 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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